All Comments on 'Altered'

WTF happened in the end? why would you kill him off... instead of adding a couple of chapters???

the story was looking great 10/10 until that part...7.5/10

ok..yes, I understand, teach people the dangers of drugs, but come on! thats just so wrong! please consider writing another version of this with a better ending....you can't make us love the characters then kill off the only thing keeping Annie alive. And you know he is.

I thought the ending was funny

I thought it was good...I do feel that you used the word Daddy too often....but it was totally true to an Xstasy fueled fuckfest.....

hahaha i should know :P

Ok I just want to say that after reading that. Thats a fucking story thats how they should be written rerally good stuff and good detail in the begining in the middle and fucked up in the end, very intense dialogue. I dont know what type of point you were trying to make at the end but if you can post a comment on that-that would be cool. Gotta say that it got me in the end Fear Factor style. Ive been reading a lot of these styles stories and this one is at the top best out of 4. Thx for writing.

Great job with the story. Very long and detailed which I feel actually creates a bond between the reader and characters. The ending was actually a great set up, you at this point can either kill Calvin or some how get him medical attention. The ending is vague enough still to pull off a great part 2. Though I will admit after reading it I am saddened like most others, Annie and her father having a tragic past, we look to having happy ending for the 2 characters who have nothing more than each other...

Stopped reading when she bought him Viagra.... You skipped to the end right there and the story should be longer...

Fantastic story with a heartbreaking ending. As a romantic I wanted the happy ending with a baby and happily ever after.

Ditto

Dark and poorly written. 9 pages and then dead. I would say it was a buzz kill but this sucked at page 1. *