by WFEATHER
Good story but this installment was thin on the movement of the story.
We already know 18yr old Amber and the unnamed older neighbor will become lovers, but would like to see Amber not be able to be fulfilled by him. Would like to see her with end up having sex with two or three other men. But Amber would eventually choose one man to be with.
excellent chapter 2 . . . logicaly building and setting the stage for later . . very well done . . slow builds are the best
Two chapters on two different days and little has happened. You're losing your readership rapidly. Great disappointment. The chapters are too short too given the build up you're trying to create.
I think the talk and the conflicting emotions were the highlight of this installment... I'll keep on this story until it reaches its conclusion. Don't worry about the others. If they want instant gratification, there are other stories. I'm glad a more mature approach was taken.
I agree wholeheartedly with toddster119. I love the buildup and the anticipation. The characters are getting into a comfortable relationship and it's nice sometimes to read a story where the characters take some time to slowly stoke the fires and not just jump into the sex. You're doing great and please keep it up. I'm a loyal follower of this one!!!
A bit thin to sustain one part, but for readers (like me) who fall upon the story after more installments are in place, the issue is much less pressing of course. Still, IMHO, you want to see a bit more development per each section (mutual attraction have been established already in the first part). But the bottom line remains - a very nice read a la tradition of the young seductress of an older man. BTW, It used to be 'ok' to present much younger women-girls in similar stories, before society drew the line at 18. Now they ALL seem to be 18...
Another wonderful chapter. It was a little short but I like where the story is going.