- Mature
- Amber Ch. 10
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"I... LOVE... YOU... AARRRRR- AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
Amber's climax was powerful indeed, surging around me as she quivered both internally and externally, spasming violently beneath me as if I was giving her a long and powerful electrical shock. I was grunting loudly, trying desperately to hold back my impending release, trying to enjoy her pleasure for as long as possible before succumbing myself...
It was a battle I quickly lost. Calling her name, I unleashed my seed within her, multiple jets of my love splattering inside her and renewing the intensity of her cries. Only vaguely was I aware of anything not directly related to our shared pleasure and our intense love.
Amber collapsed beneath me, breathing hard and fast, her voice raspy. Her hands lost their grip upon me and slowly fell to the bed. We shuddered together with the aftershocks of our shared pleasure, and despite myself, I collapsed upon her, my full weight pressing her into the bed and almost certainly making it a bit harder for her to breathe.
When I finally lifted myself from her, I gazed into Amber's wide eyes and saw only the woman in her. The little girl I had known was almost certainly still within her, but I could not see her in those beautiful, expressive eyes.
She looked around in awe, as if noting the girlish bedroom for the very first time. "This is my past," she whispered. Then she looked into my eyes again, reaching up to caress my cheek. "You are my future."
The girl I had known was now a woman.
She was my woman.
She was my Amber.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 8 years agoI am enjoying reading this but PLEASE stop with the 8yr old girl references during sex! Even in the negative 'no longer the 8yr old girl' there are so many of them it's creepy!
Anonymousabout 13 years agoThis is a pretty good story. I like the long buildup. My problem is with the dialogue. It's stilted. It's okay if the internal narration is a little choppy, but if you're really going for a teenager, and it seems you are by mentioning "squee," I don't think you're being very realistic.
An example;
"I presume from your lack of intelligent comment that you approve of my attire?"
Do you know any teenager, or anyone in real life, who talks that way? I don't.
Here's a suggestion. Try saying the dialogue out loud. Not just in your head, but out loud. Decide if it sounds realistic. If it does, hey, go for it, what do I know? But, I think you might find that as you get more experience you'll find the dialogue flowing better.
Just my eight hundred cents. But trust me, I know this stuff.
eric
Ilovemypantsover 16 years agoI loved reading about Amber and Aaron, and I wish there was more, it would be great to see how their relationship develops now.
MollyDollyover 16 years agoGirls today are more experienced. I was into oral way before vaginal intercourse. I think every aspect of the story was fantastic- thanks for an incredibly hot story!
Anonymousover 16 years agoAnother great chapter. I hope this isnt' the end. I love reading about these two characters.
Anonymousover 16 years agodon't let the story end here. thereare a lot of things for them to go through yet.please take this for a long novel . ti is a pleasure to read it the first thing every morning.
shmueltzviover 16 years agoI just loved the story and the decent ending. Beautiful!!
And I'm so happy you resisted suggestions to trash the story. Needs (at least)one more chapter to wrap up loose ends. For example the birth control pills might have been used just to deal with menstrual cramps and irregularities. And was she postponing the consumation to avoaid pressuring Aaron? And do they live happily ever after? (I hope so!!)
Keep up the good work. BRAVO!!!!
Anonymousover 16 years agoWhy would Amber be on the pill and why would she have popped her own cherry if she was supposed to be a virgin? And in Chp. 9, she allowed Aaron to cum on her face. Doesn't sound like a virgin to me.Sounds to me like Amber is a very experienced young woman! I think Aaron was just one of Amber's many sexual conquests. But, that is my opinion.
Invisible2uover 16 years ago...for not turning this story into something trashy by making her some kind of man hungry slut. I despise it when truly beautiful stories like this one succumb to the 'suggestions' of some readers to make it into some weird, unnecessary orgy. Their first time was beautiful and it was fitting to let go of the little girl in her in her old home! I for one would LOVE to read more about them as they start their lives with one another! I really do hope you continue this. If not, please know that you have been added to my list of favorite authors with this story! Congrats on a job well done with this!!
