All Comments on 'Ambushed'

Very yummy indeed! This is one story that you should follow up on and let us see where they go together! Thank you!

I liked this story. Slower build up to create character intimacy. I hope see a continuation!

I really enjoyed this dynamic. Excellent job! :)

Rather disjointed story.... I wonder how it was rewritten (or what it was like before).

In the first part particularly, there is inclusion of the present tense, which jars in a story related in the past tense.

It's only very late in the story that it becomes clear that Wallis and Mrs.Needham are the same person. Could that be deliberate? Personally I think specifying the teacher/principal as "Wallis Needham" early in the story would be helpful and clear.

You always paint a beautiful story! Makes me wish I had a teacher willing to mentor and teach me how to be a good girl when I was in school.

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