All Comments on 'American Dream'

What a wonderful story... touching and erotic all at the same time.

Everything a good romance should be.

Boyd

I enjoyed this very much. I am not sure just how probable it could be but it has a good ending---great.

Just love your story. Guess I'm just a softy

Well written Slyc, another "5".

Guy starts looking for the perfect girl. After trying many one night stands he meets his dream girl Gabi. He realizes he has found someone special. Wonderful Story. Well written.

very touching with a sweet ending. I loved it.

Im a wrestler and i cried, imagine that?!?!?! touchy... wonderful...

the spark is missing!

i thought it was a really good story

but as an indian i found it really racist and you sounded like borat

Very well written, with suspense, romance, erotic... moving in every sense. Enjoyed it very much.

Well done. "Moved me" on 'many different levels'. Thank you.

Bumped into this, having read some months ago, and Had to read again. If I could express myself any better, I'd be writing also.

Need more like this.

happy ending is nice! Gabi is nice!

I mean, how seriously pathetic. Narcissistic, predatory, and shallow as the main characters in your stories are, I can tell that you're actually trying to write- so that obliges me to encourage you not to.

It's unsettling how much energy you have for writing asshole paradigms.

Tags: narcissists, American psycho, douchebags, declaring love during sex, self-delusion, sleazy bartender

I enjoyed your story. I also appreciated the fact that your spelling and grammar are excellent. I'm getting ready to read some of your other stories now.

That was such a beautiful story. Well done.

Wow, that was a very great story! You used correct grammar most of the time (with only a few honest, minor mistakes), and the story line was..... Interesting, if not touching. The characters were well developed, and the sex (or oral sex, for most of it) scenes were written well. At first, I didn't really want to read it, because the main character was interested in prostitution (with some reason though, I guess), which I something I'm extremely disgusted with, but this story surprised me. I had already understood that not many prostitutes out there actually like their work and only do so for desperate reasons, but this gave me a more thorough depth and consideration for these poor beings (I'm sure most don't have much choice but to do what they do). Regardless, I really liked the romance between Gabi and Devon despite the fact that I also am a bit disgusted with their huge age difference. But the story itself more than made up for the few disagreements of character choice. I really enjoyed the little drama with Rico and Letty, and I absolutely adored the happy ending. There are no important suggestions I could give without significantly ruining the brilliant storyline, so :)

All in all, you did an amazing job.

20 <3 / 23 <3

Keep it up!

~~ LaLaLadidahGirl ~~

I just read your story and it's now my new number one!! I like stories that not only have sexual erotica but a good story behind them and this is exactly what I've been looking for. Thank you!

What an awesome story

You don't often read stories on this site that are so sweet and feature such a stand-up guy. Was waiting for something horrible to happen, but the tone of the tale never sank to any sort of depravity. Thanks for lifting the bar!!!!!

The story being well written was a welcome surprise and an added bonus - thanks for sharing and keep up the good work (",)

Great Story

and theirs no enormous Dick , big Tits , or Anal sex

only a good story line

as it was said "Sweet Story"

REALLY liked it. Well written, no outsized dicks or tits & it had a LOT of story to it.

To me, those are the best kind.

THANK YOU.

As I read this I have 6 thoughts 1 what a great story 2 do nice guys still exist 3 how do you find them 4 this story was fantastic 5 pretty woman can't compete with this 6 does loosing your cherry really hurt oh fuck *shutters and shakes*

-princess

P.s. Thanks again

one-bedroom efficiency (AN EFFICIENCY DOES NOT HAVE A SEPARATE BEDROOM!!!!)

text books (textbooks)

man boulevard (main)

Beingan (Being an)

first-hand (firsthand)

not getting to close (too)

eeys (eyes)

High Desert (high desert)

thesis (dissertation) (A THESIS IS THE CULMINATION OF A MASTER’S PROGRAM!!!!)

room mates (roommates)

slum lord (slumlord)

melting away like a cotton T-shirt in a downpour (UNCLEAR IMAGE!!!!)

sub-machine (submachine)

Liked it, until you described Gabi's loss of virginity, which was so inaccurate it completely broke the spell. One's hymen doesn't literally 'pop', and it's not deep inside a girl's vagina; it's the tight crescent of skin around the rim of the vagina that tears when it's stretched too far (often during first penetration). Fantasies obviously don't have to be lifelike but characters with impossible bodies kind of ruin the fantasy.

Yes very good. Not just the sex but a good story.

Sex good and the story better. Together spells well balanced and satisfying. Thank you

This little story has everything one could want in a good romantic read. Very, very enjoyable. Bravos.

Great story. Thank you for taking the time to write it.

This one hit home I used to work in a welfare office. I saw way too many Gabis and far to few Devons.