All Comments on 'American Dream'

Decent story, but could any wife actually be that stupid? Everything she said and did made it seem as if she was too dumb to know how to breathe. How did they stay married THAT long?

...but, like the previous comment, I just didn't buy into the wife's level of idiocy. It read more like a plot device than an organic component of the story.<p>The ending was a tad abrupt. I'd have liked a little more exposition on the events that followed.<p>Minor quibbles; this is top-drawer writing, welcome indeed in this age of semiliteracy.

Again, as usual, good writing but the story could have been a bit more clear about his wife. How could she fool around during the company parties ? What did she do with the art teacher before taking him to Spain. That part is not really believable. Was she really thinking that she could come back just like that and he would feel sorry for ? Come on.

G.Belgium

Good Work!! Your writing is entertaining! I look forward to the next offering that you put on the list!

The wife character is a bit hard to take, typically in a cheating scenario. They tend in real life to be a bit more sneaky unless the personality is dominant and that didn't come through in the text. But the story holds attention, well spaced and crisp. Not bad. Not bad at all, thanks for a good read.

MGM

...but I doubt if the husband could put up with the wife for a long time. I did enjoy the tale.

but the husband was a wimp. No one should accept the open contempt of their spouse. When he finds out that his wife has been fucking around on him for years, what does he do? He leaves her with all their assets. He had no balls. Aside from that the story was well written. You still need to work on the relationship between what a character knows and how a real person would react. In this case he acted like a wimp by not reacting at all.

It seems to me, that you've got a tremendous problem to ceate credible female protagonists... They're all somewhere between stupid and/or insane! You should work on that... perhaps by trying to write a story from a wife's POV!........ Regards - Bavarian!

Excellent writing. Characters are not to be believed though... Both of them acted way too unreal...

"Good holiday Jodie?" I enquired, having got a coffee for her and a tea for myself. <p>

"Started ok," she replied quietly. "Sorry if I over reacted a bit." <p>

"Terry not as good in the sack as you thought he would be then?" <p>

Jodie looked up at me sadly, and a single tear rolled slowly down her cheek. <p>

"Not really," she started to tell me. "Then I caught the bastard in bed with one of the maids. In my bed ---- in my room." <p>

I neglected to point out that they had been sharing the room in question, and that in any case, strictly speaking, it had been our bed and our room. It was me who had paid for the damn holiday. <p>

"Can you believe that Dave?" she went on. "We were supposed to be on holiday together and he went off and fucked someone else and left me on my own." <p>

"That must have been difficult for you my dear," I sympathised. After all, I knew how she felt. <p>

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What kind of parallel world was this story was supposed to have transpired in? It is so cute! LOL <p>

Of course, the AUTHOR, via his/her husband character, is supposed to be momentarily tell the stupid bitch ---- who's complaining how AWEFUL IT WAS that her LOVER did what he did.... --- it's OVER.... [But, of course, it's not important to her now what the husband did; it's what the lover did to her in their hotel room that the TEACHER wife was SO UPSET NOW, telling her husband, "it's just horrible, dear husband, her big Arnoal Schzarzenegger, who's SO MUCH better as a lover than Mr. Terry Jones!!!] <p>

"Can you believe that bastard, dear husband? Oh, the nerves he has! To fuck that whore in MY ROOM, in that fancy hotel I reserved in advance for HIM and me, do you believe that, dear husband? But, dear, back to the present: If you promise NOT to take me for granted again, like you've been doing, we can get on with our lives again, okay?" LOL <p>

Again, what kind of fuckin' parallel, fantastical world was this fictional story was supposed to have taken place? Shouldn't you TRY write stories that REMOTELY resemble "reality", or at least has some figment of our imagination in mind????? LOL

a whole bunch of 8 year-old girls broken hearted in the US of A, too, like your little 5-year-old Mai-Lin (a little version of your exotic Asian American Mai-Lin... <p>

FYI: <p>

Here in the USA, Asians are so easily scared, embarrassed, and humiliated, they'd sooner name their kids some pure stiffy-upper-lippity names like ELSPETH, Gwyneth, or Gowendolyn than traditional Asian names like Mai Lin... so Mai-Lin must have been FROM Asia, not from America!! I know, because I am Asian. LOL <p>

Dear author, we know you was just tryin' to entertain us; but you gotta pull your head out of the ass and think of stories that are remotely realistic. <p>

When you put out pieces like this, the reader shift the entertainment and laughs on to YOU, the author, NOT your stories or characters. You can blame stupid readership or jealousy or such nonsense; but it's YOU the author who asked for such silly laughs from your readership... <p>

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Mai-Lin was as beautiful as the day when I first saw her, probably more, and her smile seemed to light up the entire terminal when she spotted me waiting for her. <p>

Leaning over to her two travelling companions, she pointed me out to them, and they both rushed over towards me. <p>

"Daddy --- Daddy --- I've missed you so much," cried out Maddy, our five-year-old daughter, as she leapt into my arms. She was a miniature version of her mother and had already left several broken hearted young boys behind when she had left to come and live in the UK. <p>

"Hi Dad," greeted my eight year old son a little less spontaneously, but the smile on his face said it all. He was already tall for his age, and I couldn't wait to see how he made the change from the American style of football, to the European version, soccer. <p>

The hero was unable to communicate with his wife. She knew

how to keep him line and generally mislead him. When she is finally unmasked you think that she would then have something intelligent up her sleeve, but instead she takes on the role of not being able to comprehend what is going on. Possibly because she does not pay much attention to what he is saying. You know I have known some teachers like that. Everything is preprogrammed and if you question it either the ignore it or go ballistic but the maximum they can do is go back and repeat what they all ready said. Perhaps being in a dominant role in school and in their castle went to her head, but the husband was out of it. As I understood he it he left her with a heavily mortgaged house and a broken down car while moving on to a much higher salary and many perks... basically letting her have the two items was an example of noblesse oblige! I enjoyed it. Thanks.

This is a well written and well-thought through story. I've known women like Jodie (was married to one for nine long years) and you wrote her credibly. Her narrative about the neighbor "cheating" on her was very funny.

Not sure if it is a comedic article of sorts, or exactly what is trying to be conveyed. Pretty humorous though...

Very amusing, albeit a bit predictable. The ending seemed rather abrupt, though. OK, so he comes back to the UK with his American family, so what? I would anticipate some sort of contact with his ex, even if accidental, to 'rub her nose in it', so to speak.

every single story its the same thing from this guy. This author can write but he cant tell a story

of a short end and no conclusion out of the story as it really end it with his flight to the us. and no deeper thoughts from his or her side. now there is only one question left, how come all those women are so greedy and fucked up?

one described here. But the main character is also very slow. She had already demonstrated to him in public her utter disregard for him and her marriage. He was a fool to attempt to maintain it. He was gone nine years plus a bit but returned with a wife and an 8 year old son. I assume he began divorce proceedings on his prior wife before he left. Dont know how many months that takes in the UK but most states in the US require at least 3 months between filing and divorced. We will assume the woman he married had his son, so put ten months in front of the eight years, we dont know eight years plus what. So now we have about nine years. When did he meet this asian beauty or was he fucking her all along and as soon as he left his wife in the UK be made his girlfriend immediately pregnant before the divorce? Realism is needed to make stories like the erotic. This was a fair story of a stupid woman and a slower than normal man, but it lacks the threads of reality need to make it make sense.

Have to agree the scenario is a bit much for reality, but heck I loved it for an entertaining read. <P>Good fantasy fun and entertaining to the end. <P>Thanks for the story<P>PT

What happened to the Ex Wife did she ever remarry?

That reminded me when i lived in Surrey for 3yrs i was a young kid myself .

The wife's character was a bit 'over the top' but that just made it a fun story to read. Crisply put together with a nice wrap-up at the end. Well done.

Would have enjoyed the ex-wife suffering a bit more. None the less a happy no wimps ending, and I LOVE a happy ending.

You worked this out perfectly. Keep writing. There are way to many wimpy gay husband stories out there and I found this quite refreshing. Thanks for the post.

I agree with most of the commenters here that the character of the wife was just too over-the-top. The wife was described as a bit self-centered. That is an understatement. The wife is totally self-absorbed with no consideration for anyone or anything that doesn't benefit her. I think that if the wife's character had been dialed back just a bit the story would have been a 100.<br><br>I like the author's writing and hope that he continues.

Don't worry too much about the experts. I personally wouldn't write the story this way but then it isn't my story. By the way Arsenal are not doing as well as the could be. Perhaps they need an ENGLISH player playing for them!

This story was so well written that the truncated way in which it ended left me shocked and dismayed. You discredited the entire plot by the nonchalant conclusion. Your ending, as your main character, lacked any semblance of emotion or closure.

I have to disagree with most of the commentators here. Jodie is a fairly recognisable character, whose sense of entitlement precludes any empathy. Dave detected the changes four months previous to his story, and noted the progression. Once she left with the art teacher, Dave put his plans into motion. He walked away with the prize she wanted. The epilogue simply illustrated that his prize was even greater. And by my calculations, "FORWARD NINE YEARS, THREE MONTHS AND SIX DAYS", gave him six months for the finalisation of his divorce and courtship, before Mai Lin's pregnancy

Why didn't he try to phone her before she left while they were both at the airport?

That seemed obvious to me.

I know you heard the same from many readers – I concur, I strongly suggest that you tone down the way you portray the villains in your stories. As in this story – the wife is described as an amalgam of a borderline retarded, a narcissist and emotionally unstable with extreme mood swings. Talk about painting the villain in the darkest shade of black you could have found… <P>

The reason for suggesting that you consider toning down is not due to a personal bias towards a certain plot line. But if you wish the reader to buy into the plot, it would make more sense to start with more or less normal behaviors and build in changes which the story can account for. The reader asks what happened that turned the wife into such a hateful scornful (yet so dumb) person towards her husband. True, it is mentioned that she was always hard headed, but what we see at present is extreme mental abuse. Doesn’t the husband know the difference? On the other hand if she changed, it is hard to believe that such extreme contempt and disregard could have surfaced in such a short period of time. And in any case why would the husband want to save anything with a skunk like her when we are not shown that there was something worth saving in these relations? Seeing what we see, he should have rejoiced for being given an out of relation with a terrible abuser. But that is not what you were aiming at. You tried to show a reluctant husband, who tries to preserve the marriage until he is pretty much hit with a hummer (figuratively speaking) by the wife’s idiotic narrative and complaints about her adventures with her lover (???). As a result of the husband’s inexplicable efforts to save the marriage, his credibility as a character is flawed as well. <P>

The ending was the strongest part this time, but by than I could not believe the wife’s character and could not understand the husband’s.

you as a writer don't finish your stories,they're good stories.please finish the stories they would be better.

Have you ever heard a recording of yourself and the wife as you argued?It is amazing what one will endure for years from a loved one which would not be tolerated beyond a minute with a stranger. We tend to explain away or automatically excuse the ranting and pettiness of the wife. For that reason, I do understand how such a relationship could work for so long. I was a bit disappointed that you gave the impression that Mai Lin was handed out as an executive benefit to the new recruit. Perhaps a follow-up story about how their relationship developed? As for Jodie, I for one had had enough of her! However, a separate story where she confronts her own demons and works them out on Terry's head might be interesting. Good work as usual!

was such a wimp to put up with his wife;s attitude all the years. I wou;d have let her do it just once...that's all. I would have cut my losses a lot sooner

Almost didn't make it past the first page because it was getting so retarded, though the wife is quite lifelike in that there certainly are such bitches and weak men who 'love' them. That's not love of course. It's abuse and lust confused with love. Not much to take away from this story other than that some people need to take the initiative and leave a relationship before it leaves them slaves to others. Your work is becoming a bit formulaic. Time for a change?

You are a good writer and you spin good story. But just when Jodie gets a dose of reality and realizes what she is about to lose Dave walks out of her life. What happened to her? Was there any growth/discovery/self-awareness? Did she learn from her mistakes? Did she ever write Dave an honest, from the heart letter telling him she was sorry (i.e. speaking from her understanding and from her heart, not her pain over the art teacher and her selfishness)? Part of the story was about moving on. But do we ever completely lose our connection to those with whom our lives were once entertwined? What happened to Jody?

Congratulations. A very well written story, part satire, part comedy with a litle innovative loving wife plot mixed in. Keep up the good work.

60 year old George

Maybe it's just culture, but the expressions of the husband made me think of a gay guy throwing up his hands at all the horribly awful things happening to him. The character was almost infantile in his handling of life, and he was supposed to be a high powered industrialist?

Morris dancing and Arsenal eek!?!

but I hope all you stories don't lean towards the wife as being a total self-centered slut that has a wimp for a husband. You redeemed this story when the husband dumped her for another pretty young thing but I don't see him as doing any better with his reluctance to rock the boat no matter what.

This is like a Winterfrog story concerning the women, but he has stronger husbands that either try to stop the stupid wife from cheating deliberately or offers divorce papers if they continue to disrespect him.

I really don't understand your approach. I have to speculate from your writing that British husbands don't really expect marriage vows to be respected by the wife? Or husband?

Nice story. You doubters who express disbelief at the existence of gorgeous twats with intellectual and moral blinders in tandem with zero sense of irony don't get out to the thresholds of posh steakhouses and fern decorated bars that I've done hard time at. Is the breed prevalent , well no but only because they don't breed quite so much due to fear of losing beauty sleep , stretchmarks and selflessness that are entailed in ideal care and feeding of rugrats.

As is norm for perverted Poms. Well worth 1* I have awarded it. Some comments only reinforce the facts.Like slamdawgg with his pompous diatribe. He must be a Pom too!

Overall-- vile and repulsive.

...but highly unrealistic, especially the characters and the obviously pre-arranged departure to spain. 4*

Not realistic and normally I give unrealistic stories. However, since the story is a comedy, I gave it a pass for not being realistic.

He is a asshole, because he left a self centered cheating bitch. Why is it so hard to believe, it could happen. He left an moved to America, met someone new and moved on. Is it because he met a better model, hummmmmm it happenes all the time. And as far as she concerned she got what was coming to her. If he didn't work then the bitch would complain that he was around to much or he should get a job.

first, the stupidity of the woman. She doesn't even have the smart, or the grace to hide her cheating

second, somebody as slow-witted as the guy could never strive as a chief executive. If he can't smell the infidelity of his own wife, he wouldn't be able to smell the trickery of his competition.

That's what happenes when you cheat on your spouse.

YOU LOSE.

YEAH

I suppose this was the best way to cut her but I think I would have smacked her around a little when she got back. I would not have given her a damn thing, I would have made her fight for everything.

Thanks for sharing.

His first wife was smart enough to hide her previous cheating, but so dumb she thought she could take a lover to Spain without repercussions. What if he'd caught the next flight out and walked in on them in bed together? Their final conversation sounds like she's brain-damaged.

Thoroughly enjoyed it. She must have thought he was a simpleton.

Jodie's picture must be next to the word stupid in the British dictionary.

Here I am late to the party again. I don't think the wife was so much stupid as so overconfident she took her husband totally for granted. She'd pulled some stunts before and probably assumed he'd put up with anything. Of course she out of his life; divorce was a foregone conclusion. I'm pleased he showed so much forbearance. I would have enjoyed a little more apoplexy from the wife. "How could he? Why wasn't he taking me? He could believe...Oh my...what will I do now? blah blah blah..." I think that would have been fun to read. Maybe also a little comment from hubbie while he was in America about his wife's unsuccessful attempts to recoup her lost marriage Of course this is a five.

I, like others, missed a bit of reconciliation attempts by (former) Sweetie! Thwarted, of course, with the same aplomb as Hubby exhibited during their last tea!

5*

Minor quibble, and maybe things are different in the U.K., but I thought airline tickets weren't transferable.

I'd be somewhat interested in what happened to the ex.

Airline tickets were transferable in the USA as recently as the 1990's, nothing in the story sets the date of it.

The change was from a terrorism scare years before 9-11

No idea for the UK.

But I wonder if British law is so different from the laws in the USA? Yes, he made over the title to the house and the car to her, but what about all the other things his name was on, like credit cards, cell phones, utilities, etc? And how did he get divorced? Nothing about either of them going to a lawyer. Did she divorce him for abandonment? Or did she NOT divorce him and waited for him to return to England as a bigamist? That would have been an interesting turn of events to see you write about. Just a couple of odd questions that popped into my mind.

very funny. Clearly not intended to be taken seriously. Five stars.

I did give you 4 stars on this one. the only reason for that because you could have done A LOT BETTER with the ending. something like the whore wife and her teacher friend how they turned out and you could have elaborated a bit more as to what happened with the wife when she met her now rich husband and his new wife. You know like how she was soooooo distraught when she saw them and how she seen how much she lost by her little bit of being a whore for her teacher friend. That, my friend, would have gotten you a 5 star rating. Because that would have been a better ending to a ( what could have been a great story ) story than what you ended with. It just seems so frigging incomplete otherwise. But all-in-all still just a good story.

You know what would have been nice? If when meeting his wife and children his ex-wife was working in the airport as a janitor and saw them. And cried.

Poetic justice.

Definitely needed some nose-rubbing for his ex!

until the tables become upset, TK U MLJ LV NV

- That teacher wife was some piece of work! And hubby was a wimpy asshole letting her get away with her flirting,dancing,(and fucking?) at company functions,as well as showing off her tits in stores.All for some stupid,rationalized payback for something trivial?!

- As soon as he saw her taking that art teacher with her on his vacation to Spain,he should have had a divorce lawyer working on the papers!

- She played her husband for a fool and got what she deserved but,a happy-go-lucky wack-job like her will end up on her feet,and most likely her back,with some equally wacky asshole!

The bulk of the story was a good one, but, the ending was extremely lacking, it could have been so much better... I also couldn't give you more than 4 stars on this one and for the same reasons that were stated in Sinsational83's diatribe...

Sorry

KarenE has a great point.

In real life, you let your woman act like that over and over and over and do nothing, she is not going to have any respect for you.

The wife's actions, while a bit over the top, are not completely farfetched given the situation they are in with him basically being pussywhiped.

As Karen implied, a good paddling the first time she acted like a spoiled entitled child could have stopped her behaviour back then.

That being said, this was a good story about a wimp finally having enough with a spoiled selfish cheating cunt.

And there wasn't anything wrong with the ending.

I couldn't get over how Jodie was so self-centered that she actually didn't see the irony of the guy that she cheated Dave out of his holiday with, was now cheating her out of hers!

While she MAYBE hadn't already been sleeping with Terry (doubtful!), she obviously had SOME sort of a relationship with him, and she was just looking for ANY excuse to take him along, hence her "Oh shit," when it's revealed that he "just happened" to have his luggage and passport with him!

Good story. Easy read. Plot ok too. Would like former wife to have been at airport doing some task and seeing her ex and his beautiful wife and children . She then really felt the pain of her loss due to her selfish stupidity.

I'm not sure if the story is satire or a parody based upon the general style of loving wives. Either way Jodie's character needed to be outrageously larger than life and for what ever reason spiralled into self destruct over their LAST 4 MONTHS. Maybe a mental breakdown. I must admit Jessica Rabbit crossed my mind as her role model - although Jodie's quote would be "I'm not bad. I just act that way".

It surprised me how many commenter's didn't get it as humour - and many that did - didn't realise it was satire/parody needing to be over the top.

Britease you have really pulled that off. You only have to look at wide degree of emotional comment to see how your Jodie character got to people - well done! Personally I really felt Dave's anguish and despair when he found his air ticket had been transferred.

The story was primarily about Dave and Jodie Martin's life together written solely from the view point of Dave Martin who I read as a competent very laid back guy who loved his wife. He only lost his cool briefly when he saw his marriage slipping away - otherwise he ignored Jodie's outbursts only fighting the important battles but reminding her there would be dire consequences if she crossed the line. Once crossed she had gambled - lost and was out of the story.

Personally I felt the story should have ended with Dave's departure to the US and their separation.

The "Happy Ever After" ending had nothing to do with Jodie and therefore appeared contrived and a distraction generally out of keeping with the humorous style of the main story.

Dave having moved on to a new life in a different culture with no reminders of his past life - together with the pressures of his new job would give him little time to give Jodie more than a passing thought. Hence with the principal character gone there was no more to story to tell. No need for divorce details etc. which we have already read all of the variations dozens of times they are implicit.

Taking the story as submitted. For the purists there were three things that could not have happened but can be excused as poetic license - without loosing the spirit of the story.

One: most UK holidays abroad are package deals via a travel company using chartered flights. Passenger substitution would be difficult and would need doing days in advance. Leaving the alternative that it was pre-meditated and was already booked for Terry Jones - Jodie's outbursts being orchestrated to validate her excuse. That being the case - if Dave had arrived at the airport in time he still would be without an air ticket - so same end result.

Two: Dave would not have been able to transfer any property with an outstanding mortgage. If the property was solely in Dave's name his only option would be to put the property up for sale - otherwise if in joint names all changes would need both his and Jodie's signatures. The fact that it was mortgaged to the hilt suggests that a large part of the family income went on mortgage repayments which would be more than Jodie could afford. The net result would be the same as the story - without mortgage repayments the mortgage lenders would foreclose - leaving Jodie with the less than 1000 bucks proceeds from the sale.

Three: I doubt that Dave could have got an US work permit within two weeks - but no doubt he be used as a consultant paid from the UK in the interim.

Out of interest. Going by the date the story was published - the Spanish incident occurred no later than 1999 therefore before the tightened security following 9/11

Page 1 He has a new job, now he needs what he should have gotten years ago, a new wife. Should have left her with those young guys at the club, changed the locks and started divorce proceedings.

Page 2 She left without him. Excellent! Gives him plenty off time to hide assets, pack his shit and head to his new job.

Hey George, thanks for cluing me in my wife was a slut.

Why wouldn't she think he would come crawling back? He put up with her shit before.

Better late than never to dump the bitch.

Page 3 Five year old girls don't leave broken hearts behind. Five year old boys could give a shit about a girl

Great story. Way too patient of a husband.

It’s nice to see a BTB story where the response is appropriate and just.

Why paint Hubby as having cuckold-like thoughts (got excited by her exhibitionism, despite overtly quibbling about it?) He is clearly more concerned about the way others see him than about how she is accelerating her slut factor. He could easily have been laid-back, but sincerely unhappy all the way through this tale. And, YES, it shoulda ended with Hubby not looking back as he was going back to his plane.

4*

Honestly, it's no wonder that Jodie never doubt for a second that her Dave would eventually forgive her for going on vacation (on his dime!!!) with her lover, given how long it took the poor bastard to fully realize how completely she betrayed him in the last moment of his marriage. The man actually tried to discuss with her the poor status of their union, while she chastises him... as she was laying next Jones! Fuck... such a cold-hearted action pretty much prove this wasn't close to be the first time she got some outside of her couple.

In a way, Dave got extremely lucky that this American transfer happened when it did, otherwise it sure looks like he would have been stuck with the bitch. Actually, a case could be made that, if Jodie went back home, after just a week of fucking around with her lover in Spain, he would have probably take her back... I mean, he still tried to reason with her, even when his boss George made it very blatant that he thought she was whoring around on him. Or maybe Dave went out of his way to be civil towards her, which, once again, kinda shows what a decent bloke he is. Seriously, he could have gone scorched Earth on Jodie (bet a whole lot of you are thinking he should!), but not only did he take the time to break up with his wayward wife, but HE FUCKING APOLOGIZED FOR IT ("You don't Jodie, () I'm sorry, but you don't" gotta be the most baffling line of dialogue in this whole story... but that's Dave, for you!)

The fact he was so damn nice about her betrayal and the end of his marriage actually made the final act of this tale feels a little bit hollow, to me. I mean, you read enough of those LW stories, and you could have guess kind easily that Dave was going to end up with Mai-Lin - it was as if it was written... which is what, actually! So us learning how happy he is now doesn't do much, as it was expected. What would have been SO MUCH better would have been him pumping on his ex, with his brood not far behind, at that same shop when she started killing off their marriage. Oh sure, that would be just as predictable as the airport scene, but boy would it be must more satisfying to watch Jodie melt down, looking at what she gave away! Also wish we had some of the courtship between Dave and Mai-Lin... but I guess that wasn't the story to be told here.

Still, it's alright to read about a good guy ending up upgrading every facet of his life after dumping his cheating spouse - as unoriginal as some of those stories sounds, I'll never get enough of them, especially given how rarely this actually happens in the real world. This was well worth reading.

Enquiring minds want to know.

Well deserved, very gentle BTB. Good story, but you have to ask.: Are women really as clueless as Jody?

What happened to Jodie.No mention of a divorce just his new wife and family so how did he get remarried.?

One of the things I dislike about BTB stories is the desire for revenge. Just be gone. Live life the best you can. Worrying about him/her afterwards is useless.

Overall I liked the story. Was surprised how clueless his wife was. I always wonder if they realize the broken dreams and damage both to their own hearts and others they do. Finding out too late.... seems like hell to me.

What happened to Jodie?Did she vanish off the face of the earth and how did he serve her with divorce papers?.

A bit over the top, but who cares?

Still, I hope none of Britease's friends

or neighbors have read this story.

Calling the world's most popular sport

"European Soccer" could easily have him barred

from his pub.

Which, I've heard, is more serious than any Brexit.

I'm willing to forgive that mistake.

For now.

Top ratings from me.

It's hard to imagine a woman that stupid and self-absorbed, but I suppose they do exist. I hope she never crosses my path!

Cheating and Cucky if likes

In the colonies we tend to say words like, slut, whore and cunt, what do they call the Jody's in Great Britain? Enjoyed the story, was a little bit different BTB. Signed: BTW

I suppose after all the drama, arguments, and outright screaming matches Dave was becoming a bit less emotionally invested in his wife. He seemed to adjust to Jodie's abandonment (it WAS) and making plans to move without too much pain. Is that just the storied "stiff upper lip" we read about Brits having?

Jodie was SOOOO stupid. No sane woman could give her husband's ticket/vacation to another man, fuck them repeatedly, call home to brag about it, and expect to fuck her way out of it when she gets back.

A brief epilogue from Jodie's POV would have been sweet (she did it ALL to herself, HaHa) but, since the story was 1st person, surely there were a few friends who would have passed on news of her to Dave.

After the way she treated him, the only person that would have met her at the airport, would have been a process server. He had more backbone with his boss, then he did with that shrew of a wife, and the boss didn't disrespect him. It showed that he was more comfortable having a real conversation with his boss, was he gay?

Well told - 5 stars. Thanks

This is a great example of the reason why I enjoy LW.

Bill

Yes ... but that was the point! I thoroughly enjoyed this one. Perhaps a little more rubbing ex's nose in her own mistakes, like so many other readers, would have been nice. The minor plot errors, like the airline ticket change did nothing to hinder my enjoyment. It all worked, she had it planned in advance and hubby figured it out.

His subsequent conversations with his ring wearing trollop were laced with sarcasm that she didn't get, but the reader did.

Well done. 5*s from me.

No sympathy you allowed it

Just sorry you rewarded for being such a wimp

Wonderfully plotted. 5*

I loved this story but the last page has got to go.

Super example for others. Great . I should think others behave.

Put food in front of hungry guys don't expect them to leave it alone

Any spouse who lets the other flaunt their bodies in public has no one but themselves to blame if they are taken up on their offer

Seen too many young Marines don't take no at that point

Tease the animals you might get mauled

A little too much sarcasm just flying over her head. How about making it clear to the Byatch how she screwed the pooch!

Mostly perfect. I love this story. I do wish you'd elaborated on his wife's situation 10 years down the pike, just to add some context to his success. Hope you write more.

I ran into my ex-wife while out shopping with Mai-Lin and the kids. I was to meet my wife and kids at the Mall, after work, to buy some clothes for out holiday to Spain next moth.

My ex-wife saw me at the same time as my current wife. My ex-wife started to come towards me just as my daughter ran towards me. I knelt down and gave her a huge hug. I gave my wife a kiss. My ex-wife hesitated for a bit but decided she needed to talk so continued walking towards me. I introduced Mai-Lin to Jodie.

Jodie asked if we could talk. I looked at Mai-Lin and she nodded her head (it seemed we had a telepathic connection and had had since we first saw each other) and she said she would take the kids for ice cream while we talked.

We sat down in a coffee shop and proceeded to catch each other up on our life.

We talked for about 15 minutes. She told me she still worked for the same company and had received 2 promotions and was doing quite well. She still lived in the same house with her 9 year old son. Terry had not used condoms during the holiday and had left her pregnant when he found out about the child he denied paternity but with DNA it was proven to be his and he was forced to pay child support.

She said her life was not as she thought it would be. She then said she really stuffed up didn't she. No comment from me.

Then she caught me up with Mr Terry Jones. After the paternity case Jodie did not want anything to do with him and basically cut him out of her son's life. Jones, being the man he is, started to pursue another married woman. This womans' husband was not a clueless fool like me and realised something was up within a month. He arranged for Terry to have a little accident'. He was mugged one night when he and his latest seduction target left a restaurant. He was left badly injured and will never walk properly again nor sire children. Soon after getting out of hospital he was sacked from his job when the annual audit picked up irregularities in his accounts. He was unable to find work in his chosen field so was forced to take on any number of low paying jobs to maintain his child support payments.

He is still around town but is a shadow of himself.

The best revenge is a life lived well! It’s too bad that the boyfriend didn’t get a bit of well deserved karma.

Seriously the issue is, as with most women haters here, you make the wife so supremely stupid, as if learning to tie her sneakers would be above her intellectual pay grade.

That degree of stupid isn't even cute or funny, it is as stupid as she is portayed.

All of his stories have a buildup without any continuation. It reaches conflict and then ends. Quite frankly, britease has talent but poor execution

Again, a very good story about a foolish, cheating woman, who pays dearly for her sins.

Enjoyed your story very much

Okay story except for the child abuse in it. I mean who would want their boy to play for a shit club like Arsenal?

Ohh boy I was literally clenching my fist and gnashing my teeth as I read the selfish evil horrible actions of that first wife. I wish the author would have contructed a scenario where this evil witch’s actions were the MC explains why there union was dissolved and how he wanted nothing more to do with her.

I was enjoying it, it was going well, yes a little over the top as far as the wife freaking out as she did, and then you just had to take the super cheap emotional route to try and turn the reader even harder against the worthless wife with this little doozie

"Terry not as good in the sack as you thought he would be then?"

Jodie looked up at me sadly, and a single tear rolled slowly down her cheek.

"Not really," she started to tell me. "Then I caught the bastard in bed with one of the maids. In my bed ---- in my room."

Yeah that really REALLY stupid manipulation attempt ruined what might have been a much better story.

Jodie was written as being way too stupid, to the point of being mentally ill. Toning that down a bit could've elevated the story a bit.