by Sir Galahad
Great heat and pace. Some trite phrases like "the red-hot magma of my climax" but I can ovelook those for the other 99.9% that was white hot. LOVED how they emulated the porn scene!
Bravo!
I like your writing, but this time I lost my concentration totally when you wrote about her "rotary breathing" skills. I've heard of circular breathing that allows you to inhale through your nose while you push air out form your mouth, but rotary breathing? Does she rotate like a giant kabob on his dick while breathing or what? In short, you've done better (I LOVED Hurrah for the Pirate King and Little Ms. Marker)
Great characters, wonderful setting, a lovely paramour for "Dick" and some really top-notch sexual action. Bravo!
others not so much
more of a
what I did last summer essay
Had a Spanish lady from Amarillo. Damn near killed me. Oh to be 23 again