All Comments on 'Amy in the Pool Ch. 01'

"Athletic breasts"?

Nice story, but what I really enjoyed was your play on words. Yeah, he made me cum in the pool. I'll give it to him. He's a big prick.I couldnt swallow all that he put out. Funny shit. I like reading hot sex as much as anyone, but who says it cant be funny also? I thought those exchanges were great. Now it looks like she's about to walk in on Lauren and Jack, and if she hadn't ate pussy before, I'll bet she's about to learn. Not to mention Jack stuffing her again. Before your story is done, I wonder how many of the neighbor wives Jack will dick down. And does his wife know? Care? Participate? Great job, and cant wait for more.

Jedd

Fucking stupid.

Enjoyed. Can't wait for part 2.

Looking forward to the next part.

Great work cant wait for the next part

glad you are back man. loved another jack story

That was Hot & wild! Can’t wait for the next chapter!

Nice to see you back

Good story now when is ch 02 coming out please

Yay! New Jack Grierson story. I'm so happy.

I wonder how old Jack is by now. late 40s at least. Even 50? Such a man. I wonder if even he knows exactly how many and who are his offspring.

Very sexy! Can’t wait for chapter two

when is part 2 coming out?

Hot story

Can’t wait for the next episodes

Definitely requires a sequel or ten and consider Jack sampling Trixie's charms again as well.

Still waiting for part 2. Are you ever going to write it like you promised?

Love the first chapter. Can´t wait for the second.

I have submitted the second part to Literotica ... not sure if or when it will be approved. J

Anxiously waiting part 2. Hopefully it gets approved soon.

I agree with Anonymous in that maybe Jack could visit Trixie Ann again, in stallion pursues you left it open to where Jack would probably meet Judith on her honeymoon, cuckolding her new husband and impregnating her in the process. Maybe use that as a chance for Jack to breed Trixie again, with her husband developing ED and can only get hard to her and Jack having sex, making him intrigue to their sex life. Eagerly awaiting part 2 of this story. Can't wait to see Amy and Jack and Lauren get it on!

Where’s part two

How long do submissions usually take to be approved, assuming no editing needs to be done? Loved chapter 1.

Completely out of world fuckkk so erotic. Thinking what the Part two has Lauren and Amy both taken together by Jack Grierson

Liked it, but isn't this a LW story? But it would get crucified there.

What Happen to part two? Great story hope you are planning to continue it.

Where is part 2?

EXCELLENT: 5.0 = 100% = A+ (☆☆☆☆☆)!

This is a very well written erotic fantasy which could pass for a true-to-life story.

Amy is a keeper. End of story. Full stop.

dreamy Amy

Amy is a slut. I hope realizes that she is being used and will end up alone

I would tell him off while he was fucking me. My husband is great when we have sex but, I guess we have been together to long to have sex everyday like we use to. Keep them coming I want to read more loke this one.

Regarding Amy in the Pool Ch. 01 sequel, Part 2. I know you made a comment of part 2 being submitted 9 months ago. But have you heard anything since it has not been published? Can you try re-submitting it again or see what changes are required? Can't wait to read part 2 and see if see gets impregnated by her neighbor with the husband thinking it is his baby.

Can you try re-submitting it again or see what changes are required?

Easy slut wife, stupid dumbass and blind husband who somehow can't see a bigger man behind her in the pool while in conversation with his wife about her burger. It's so unbelievable that any eroticism is lost. Then she doesn't drown under the water while orgasming twice, for real? Far out

lol, some people have either never been to a swimming pool or just think everyone else is stupid. You can't hide what you're doing in the water, it's clear and everything can be seen. The idea that you can have sex in a pool where there are kids in the water while parents look on is absurd in the extreme. Believe me I've tried, it doesn't work ... and water isn't a good lubricant, the whole thing is just a waste of time unless you really, and I mean really get off only on the exhibitionism rather than the actual sex.

Sex in a pool is almost impossible because water counteracts and washes away any natural lubricant. How exactly is it that a grown man can hide in a swimming pool in broad daylight? Is the water not clear? How do pieces of a brightly colored bikini float unseen? There's too much that just doesn't make sense here to be able to get caught up in the story. The writer isn't merely asking their readers to suspend disbelief. The writer is assuming we're dumb enough to not catch obvious and gigantic plot holes.

they said (wrote) it all: just plain shit (stupid)!

Not a fan. A ridiculous story.

Loved it. Read it several times. Looking forward to the next chapter