by ufpe
The story makes absolutely no sense to me. Maybe I'm reading it incorrectly, but is this supposed to be coherent? She's in this mental institution: One minute she's vegetative and the next she's back to normal after she sees a burger. Her 'illness' came off as a big deal and then it just fixes itself, and they laugh it off as if it was a joke. Her character is told to us as being frigid and seclusive at the beginning yet nothing else suggests this is the case. You could literally change the adjectives and it would make absolutely no difference. The sex is just thrown in. I feel no passion between either of the characters because neither of them actually have characters to speak of. Also, why is this in the Non-consent/Reluctance section when the only sex that is involved is consensual and wholeheartedly accepted by both parties?