All Comments on 'An Accidental Family Ch. 02'

Truly a wonderful story.5 stars

Glad you've continued the story and am looking forward to what Sneaky's Abuela has to say.

A great story. Wonderful characters and a great first try at writing. Can't wait to see what you write next. Well done

Enjoyed it immensely. Please continue to share your talent at writing. Thanks! !!

A pleasure to read a well crafted story that engages your imagination and emotions. Even better it is a decent length without suffering from filler fluff. I look forward to seeing more of this quality of storytelling from you in the (hopefully) near future.

WOW!!! I loved this second part as much as I loved the first part. 5 stars from me and I hope you continue writing for our entertainment. Thank You.

That was beautiful. Thank you.

A beautiful story, well worth 5 stars.

And as one of the co-authors of As You Wish, thank you for the shout-out.

This was an incredible second part to an already good story. Honestly this kind of knocked the socks off part 1. I definitely wanna know what Sneaky’s Abuela saw, however… 👀

It has a nice easy feel and was entertaining too. Thanks for sharing your talent with us!!!

Outstanding! A joy to read.

5

Both chapters were simply great!

Only one word. Brilliant! Thank you.

Beautiful story! I can’t really find any “holes” in the story progression or writing style. As I approached the last few sentences I was thinking, “I wish they had at least one child together.” Wouldn’t you know it, it appears at the very end - Nice save! LOL! 5.0*

Way too much pollen in the air 5✨✨✨✨✨

Great story. It needs to continue to unfold as the characters who are loved continue to live on ... for they are loved and will greatly be missed. Here's wishing for chapter "3".

Wow! Incredible storyline. This is a well crafted piece of writing. Sensitive in the right places. You clearly present multiple forms of love - sacrifice, family, friendship, romance and unconditional love. JT is the perfect protagonist and Jen is the perfect partner protagonist. Both parts of the story flow from beginning to the end. Autism is presented carefully and in a wonderful fashion. The minor characters are well individualized. Thank you for this gift. K

You are a great story teller. In both of your stories I have choked up. 5stars.

Excellent part 2. Many writers on the site create their own little universe where characters mix. I can see where you could do the same. Looking forward to more stories from you. AFAW704

Very well done. The characters are well realized, and their interaction is interesting. This is a true romance. The characters clearly love each other. You can see the development of their love and friendship throughout the series. I hope that I get to see more of your stories soon.

Very much enjoyed this. Looking forward to any future works.

Thoroughly enjoyed both stories. Especially since I’m very sure I’ve eaten at that diner. Thank you.

Only one criticism, and it's truly only this readers opinion, I wish there were more chapters. As to your foreword, the highest rated stories in this category have very little in the way of long winded sex scenes. I often just skim through when I come upon them anyway. Stick around author, keep writing, I'll keep reading.

Awesome thank you!

A beautiful story and finished with the most substansial ending I ever had the pleassure to read, 5*+.

Great story throughout!

I doubted whether the first part could be bettered but you hit this one out of the park. Lisa and Sneaky is the only saddish part of the story but you managed to make that not as devastating as it might have been.

An outstanding story

Amazing just as good as your first story and a very good read,thank you

Great story. I couldn't stop reading, and I actually cried during parts of it.

The perfect ending and I’m full of tears!

I wish!

Beautiful and touching story, everyone deserves to safe and feel the love of others even though they might not be by blood. Can’t wait for the next story.

It is a 10 at least

Wow, very impressed by this story. Great emotional impact, I loved the intro of Pt 1 and the way you wrapped it up with the same terms (main character/side quest) at the end. The way the story flowed, and you get engaged in the characters. 5*

I can't say anything more than what has already been posted, just a Well Done.

I was kinda hoping that Jason and Lisa would hit it off, but with the marriage, and then adoptions, that could have made for a sticky situation.

My only 'criticism' would be with the epilogue; I felt it did too much jumping ahead and back. While singling out certain characters, it made things a bit confusing when coming back to the present and their relationships with the others. I would like to see if you can figure out something for Lisa, be it with Sneaky or someone else. She deserves it.

A very emotional read. One of the better stories on the site.

Please keep up the good work!

Wow! Over 4.9 on your first two stories, and very much deserved. The editing errors have been cleaned up, and the loose ends from Ch 1 have been tied up into a very satisfying bow. Keep writing. If you put it out there, I’ll read it.

I'm sorry for your loss. You honored your cousin in a wonderful way. Thank you

I wish I could give you 10 stars, absolutely lovely story. Well done!

Amazing, wonderful story, brought to a lovely conclusion. I'm only sad that it is so complete. I would love to hear from Sneaky's abuella.

Great story. Perfect continuation of the first story. Keep writing.

Here is a story written by someone who understands what family is and what it is worth. Hope you continue writing ,in whatever genre you choose. Found myself waitng for pt.2 and was not dissapointed (although I'm still not a fan of football,lol). But you got me with the GT500, worked on one and test drove it and yes it screams,especially after it passes 150 mph.

OML

In our world today we need stories of hope, redemption and love. Thank you for you articulate way of showing us the potential of love in our lives.

I don't give many 5's, but you wrote this one from somewhere we rarely see. Good job. Thanks for sharing.

Wonderful. 10 stars! Please keep writing. JT, and his family brought it all together. Of course, he is dad and she's mom. Don't try to hurt any of her cubs!

Great story. Hope you continue to write. 5 stars.

A simple, very good story about real life where there is unselfish love.

Recommended read.

The Hoary Cleric

Thank you, thank you, thank you. Not often that fiction gets one choked up - but you managed to get that level of emotion into the story.

Very well done. I'm anxiously awaiting more writing.

Very positively impressed! Thanks! 5🌟

Powerful, sensitive and pretty well flawless. Incredible talent. Keep it up.

Very very good.

A lot of praises in the comments below, and rightfully so. A great story thank you, I am looking forward to your next writing. 5*

Absolutely loved both stories! And Lisa needs someone to help her heal, just saying!!!!!!!!!!!

Not sure what this is doing on litERTOTIC, since there is *zero* erotica in this.

Secondly, waaaay too much talk about football. Couldn't care less about that.

Thirdly, all that cringy Schmalz there at the end. Good Lord!

There are happy endings (outside of massage parlors)- - and then there is this.

A cheerleader turning judge? 'nough said.

Just a heads up for those, who look at all these 5 star reviews much like I did. Kinda like shopping on Amazon here... ;)

A beautiful and amazing story.

Thanks

No, you are not done. Lisa and Sneaky’s story needs to be told! This story was even better than the first. Loved it. Can’t wait to see what you come up with next.

As for the asshat below who clicked on a romance story but didn’t like all the love, ignore his dumb ass. You even warned everyone at the beginning of the story that there would be no sex. Perhaps he can’t read as well as he thinks he can. He even spelled literotica wrong. Sheesh!

I had a small inkling after part 1, but the full story was so much richer.

Truly a romantic story, but I'm a sucker for that stuff. *****

WOW....LOVED the story. Can't wait to see what you post next. Please make it sooner rather than later. 5 well deserved stars just wish I could award more.😆

Such a nice story 5 stars!!!

Wow. Just WOW! I wish that many of the authors on this site could understand that romance doesn't need graphic depictions of intercourse to be a great story. I read both stories and I loved both. Your characters are highly relatable. The story was very well written and free of my pet peeve, which is miss-spelled words and misused words. Bravo! Other authors take note, this story is an absolute gem as is its prequel.

Awesome story. A real tear jerker with a happy ending. Please write more Please. This was a 5 star plus story!!!!

Another great story, but I must say I liked the first story a bit more. I guess I found it more grounded.

5 stars!! Thank you for part 2. Beautifully written and paced. I hope you have more ideas for a new story.

OUTSTANDING 5 stars just aren't enough. I can't wait to hear what Sneaky's Abuela's vision was.

This was a wondrous and heartwarming tale. 5 stars hardly seems like enough.

Beautifully written story.

I loved this story, It made me cry off and on because it was so close to home. I grew up in a body shop and lived much of this tale. 5stars.

Thank you so much for your amazing story. I loved it so much I wish there was more

Robert

An accidental treasure, finding this story. It ruined a good night@ sleep though asI've just now af 5:06 A.M. finished it, having gone back and re-read the first part first so as to have it fresh in my mind brfore startin on this concluding portion. Very well done,all the way around! Thanks for sharing it with us.

Beautiful story.

Excellent. write more when you have time.

I thoroughly enjoyed both stories. I normally limit my self to 4 pages, but you got me into it and I really enjoyed them.

Bravo.

I can’t believe someone said they didn’t know American football like that’s your responsibility. I have read stories that have cricket, netball and rugby all sports I don’t fallow. I have no idea how to score in cricket, yet still enjoyed the stories.

Loved it!

Great tale with characters who do what it takes to make the world a better place.

This was so good, I hope you have a bunch more of these in you.

A great story

5 stars

Unexpected plot twists

I have to say I did not expect Jason & Cindy to be the love connection.

I expected it would be Jason & Lisa and Sneaky & Cindy.

I really hoped Jen's parents could had "seen the light."

Sometimes the super religious cannot see the forest for the trees. (I have dealt with the super religious)

I wish Jason could have had a connected with his Bio Dad.

Please do not think the above are negatives It just added to the wonderful story you wrote

I can not wait to see if Lisa and Sneaky get back together.

Maybe if Lisa and Sneaky get back together we might see Jen's parents come around?

Just how did the girl's dad deal with Dale?

Only one thing Jen was a cheerleader, Not many religious parents allow their daughters be cheerleaders.

A beautiful story. Can't wait to read more stories from you.

Wonderful. Keep writing

Loved both parts of this story and hope you have more stories to share

I have both parts in my favorites list. This is a fun read and a good reflection on family. I hope you can share more stories.

Great Story----Damn Smoke kept getting into my eyes as I read.

Loved this. Would welcome a “Lisa and Sneaky vindicate Abuela’s vision” story. They deserve to heal and be happy.

Absolutely wonderful. I loved it. Keep writing those amazing stories of redemption and love.

5 star story, a real nice "family is what you make" type story. Echoing others, there needs to be a Sneaky and Lisa story.

Thanks for the story

Please write more when you can!

I read the two stories back to back, grinning with delight as you spun out the tale.

Looking forward to many more stories while you hang around here ... and hope you will consider sharing your writing with a broader audience, too. This story, with some editing, could likely be an Young Adult novel or a Romance , and in either case, ought to be available as an ebook and perhaps hardcopy to appear at bookstores.

Yes, you must purge Lisa's anger. Do a third story!

Wonderful work please keep it up

Spent the best Sunday morning I have had in a long time reading your excellent stories back to back, brilliant storytelling.

Many thanks for sharing your talent with us.

Powerfully emotional. Not the sort of story usually found here, and much better written. I really hope that your muse will bring us more stories.

One nit to pick. “…there had only officially been an 'ours' for Jen and I…” Why do nearly all authors on this and similar sites confuse the nominative and objective cases? It can’t be simple ignorance. Unfortunate tradition? Inside joke? Ah, never mind. The protagonists wouldn’t care.

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Excellente series!

11/10!!!!!

Loved reading more about these characters and how love and compassion can conquer many challenges