by BrettJ
.....and that's about all I have to say, so far. More, please?
Loved your descriptions of these two beauties - Very sensual and detailed! Can't wait to read more!
Not a big fan of Lesbian scenes... but your description of her getting dressed was very well done. Still curious as to why her Father didn't join in, or why that wasn't revealed.
Also... he must be /very/ hard on his actors... she went from 19 to 22 in like one paragraph. :)
At the beginning, you say that she's 19. Two paragraphs later she's 22. How old is she?
Very sexy story, shame you never wrote a sequel - I'd have loved to see Dad join in...
Yes there is a matter of detail, but I have done the same in one of my stories and had to retract and change it. BUT as so many readers told me, 'who cares?' There are whole nations in the world where ages are approximate, so why bother at all to be so pedantic about it? Loved the sex play, if guessed the plot line. P. Grimm
after reading this i got out my vibeoratot! it made my pussy so wet. i long for the day when i get a chance to eat some wet pussy. rry