by MattSBates
Would have rated this higher had there not been so many errors. Proof Reading is not only a routine towards better essaysoon but also wins more readers.
Again, your story line is ideal. The timing is on point. The engagement is exceptionally realistic. You write well, it might be your typing, an auto complete programme or older spell checker that are not your friends.
Still a good premise.
Still needs more details.
Needs to move slower.
Seems in a rush to finish. Not good.
Four stars.
5 Stars. Nice continuation of the story "Nice Hot Bath" you're very talented, don't stop writing. Now I'm going on to your third chapter.