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All Comments on 'An Evening Afloat Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
nice title

was it too much red wine?

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Plenty of

dialogue used to tell your story... unfortunately it was mostly poorly written. It's only good when it's realistic.

RossDanielsRossDanielsover 14 years ago
Well-written and realistic.

There were a few punctuation problems, but overall a really good story. A very good first submission for a promising new author.

AzPilotAzPilotover 14 years ago
Life isn't perfect, but life is good and--

I liked your story. Just a nice, entertaining story and an easy read. Thank you and keep writing.

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