All Comments on 'An Exotic Family Ep. 01: "Sofia"'

great story, but why would you write it in past tense?

I quit reading at 11 inch cock.. Frist off that is an impossible size for any man.. and just fucking stupid from the get go.. Come on, please post a little more realistic, instead of pure bullshit.

The past tense was too much. The second word of every paragraph being 'would' was just too much.

Most of the rest of it that I glanced through was okay, but not scintillating.

It just didn't grab me and say "read this, now!" Sorry.

English is the third language. Don't put so much faith in spill cheque ( spell check) and it's features. Too as another said the 11 inch dick part was dumb. Good fiction should push the boundaries of what's real . You blew right into fantasyland.

This story has potential but it needs a rewrite. As others have said the past tense is very off putting. The sizes of both male and female parts was off. The ending felt rushed and I hate to say out of character because they are yours, but he was respectful most of the story and at the end a jerk. Might i suggest backdrop a little more.

Your descriptions were good. You established just enough of a backstory but more would not be bad. You have a very solid start and with some work it has the potential for a good multipart story line.

Good story, hopefully in part 2 he Fucks the stepmom🤤