All Comments on 'An Honorable Deception'

I stopped reading after Jen was served. You telegraphed Greg was going to end up with Liz at the beginning of the story, so after Jen was served there was no point reading further.

Misogynistic shit.

I think I've read too many of these stories to enjoy them anymore. by the end of the first paragraph i already knew pretty much what was gonna happen

I did like the process server scene until the guy talked. "dont panic it might not be divorce papers being served to you at our weekly affair rendezvous."

one of the things that irks me the most in stories is what happens when she tells her life story on page two and the master plan discussion on page three. shes telling him her life story that he already knows, and she says he knows, solely because the audience doesn't know it and the author thinks they need to. and to a lesser extent with them talking about why he did it the way he did it. the whole convo reads like i want the audience to understand exactly how he was feeling and i couldn't work it in organically so ill just have her ask him the questions she probably already asked him when he was telling her the plan now. it takes you out of a story

A good story, well written and narrated, a nice flow and kept my interest. Sadly though, I can't say that I enjoyed it due to three thoroughly unlikeable characters. I guess it was the author's intention to make Jen the villain of the piece, while Greg and Liz garner all the sympathy. Unfortunately it had the opposite effect. Yes, Jen cheated, she ignored the problems within her marriage and all the while, well, for a month anyway, acted the slut for another man. In the end she got what she deserved, in fact IMHO she was probably let off too lightly. Greg though, was morally just as bad. So he didn't cheat physically, but mentally he was in love with Liz, and for much longer than a month. He may deny it but all the evidence was there, all the little snippets with him giving her money in secret, inviting her family vacations etc. How much did it actually effect what happened to his marriage? Then we had the worst, the scheming, manipulative bitch called Liz. It was no coincidence the she started the 'investigation,' that she was always there helping Greg bring about the destruction of his marriage, and of course she was there to take her reward. The two lovebirds certainly didn't waste any time getting together once the papers had been served. It actually makes one wonder just exactly what the truth was regarding her two previous marriages? But it seems she's got away with it a third time.

A tale about cheating and deception, two arrogant, foolish people thinking they were each in control, but in the end they were both totally deceived by an expert.

A very well told story that made me feel what your protagonist intended. I liked it a lot. Thanks! 5*!!

Nice to see a story again my friend.

Good story!

5

would have given this a higher score, but the ending felt really rushed.

You have to love cheaters who get so upset and indignant when they think their spouse is cheating on them but, can't be bothered to look in the mirror

Your story was quite good. I enjoyed the possibility of the two reconciling. Having it turn the way you did in today technological environment was a good twist. The fact it was not a BTB was a little disappointing.

However, that being said the resulting story caused me to give it a grade of 4 Stars, which for me are pretty high marks. I really liked the way you told your story.

Keep on writing

JH4Fun

Pretty good story but that Jen was having an affair (or that was where you were headed) was pretty obvious/predictable. I did the like the deep fake twist as well as using the "CEO's daughter" angle. Other than that, the ending was too rushed to earn a perfect score, but still a good read. 4*

Long winded and boring. It seems to me that you could have done so much better.

Topic was done many times before. I liked your attempt but it felt a bit dry.

Very good as usual although not your best. Felt a little rushed at the end. I really wish there were half stars. I gave you a 5 because it was better than a 4 but it really wasn't a 5. However as always thanks for your time and effort to write this

Damn good

Very well written.

Why didn't she tell Greg that she wasn't seeing Trent anymore, and that she only went into the room to tell him that? D

An excellent tale. Read it twice, and it actually was more fulfilling the second read through knowing that Jen was a cheater all that time.

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The scene in the elevator up to the room was one of the most insightful exposes of a cheater’s illogic I’ve ever read. Just brilliant.

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The relationship was a bit contrived…but hell…why shouldn’t Greg come out ahead? That Jen didn’t seem to suffer much will enrage the BTB trolls…but so what? Writing as good as yours goes way above their heads anyway!

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5 *****

That was quite good.

Glad it turned out right for Greg.

Thanks jmmj5.

5 stars. Thought provoking.

Greg gave Jen more chances than she deserved. Good job giving him a happy life in the end.

Good story. Five stars.

I really liked your story, it was really well written. It’s a sad tale, two good people belonging to each other but failing to communicate. A big mistake, a failure to confide and it’s over. Sad really

Ted Knight, or Judge Smails, if you please……who in the tap-dancin’ fuck is Ted Bridges

Far better than what is usually posted here. Well worth reading. 55555

I like the way you had the MC try to make her see how devastated he was by making her think he had cheated when in fact it he was just trying to make her look in on herself .

Nice attention to detail. I assume the deep fake video was only available to Jen once so that there was less chance of her discovering that it was fake. The pure shock would prevent her brain from noticing any flaws during the first viewing. 5 stars and a thumbs up for not having Greg and Liz fucking within the first 5 minutes of him staying at her home.

Well done!!! Nice twist with the deep fake video, but the reasoning made perfect sense, which helps such an unorthodox plot device seem believable and and not out-of-place. 5/5!!!

Good story. Too bad Trent didn't meet up with Greg on a dark night.

Only Karnevil's warped mind could make Greg and Liz villains in this story.

Much better than most LW stories. Worth a read.

Excellent story, quite enjoyed it.

Scores 5/5

Well written, sadly early on it was clear exactly where this was headed. Including Liz.

If it werent written on a foundation of clearly apparent cliches it would have been better.

I was going to call for reconciliation until the twist came through

Holy Shit. How in the Hell did I screw up the Ted Knight reference. I must have read that a dozen times and flew right on by. Damn, I should have posting privileges removed for several weeks for that gaffe.

@mat1729 - thanks. that was exactly what I was trying to do. He was hoping she would look at herself and confess. Oh well, I'll try do better next time. Back to the salt mines.

For everyone else, thanks for the comments and your time.

far too much innocuous detail and dialogue fluff. This caused the story to drag. Not a lot of emotion from any of the characters either. 3*

What might be the most piquant part of the story is the evidence that the fucking was only a symptom. The marriage had died from neglect long before asshole's prick entered whore's cunt. I guess the cheating just got the cuck off the dime so that he could restart a new partnership with a decent woman. In the end the whore wife appears to be more concerned about her professional future than her lost marriage. Very appropriate that their children saw their divorce coming before they did.

Well done. Thanks for the effort.

Well plotted tale.

What a great read . That was a unique way to bring her cheating to a head . His offering her that final chance at reconciliation was a remarkable tell-tale sign of the depth of his love for her and the deeper the love the more painful the betrayal , it’s remarkable that he didn’t exact revenge on her and/or her lover in some brutally violent way . Excellent work very worthy of five stars !

I liked your story. I'm glad Greg pulled the plug on Jen. The scene with Charla probably made the story, Jen never should have gone for another round with Trent.

Jen may have felt guilty when she thought Greg cheated. But this was the most poorly written part of your story. You didn't really show her feeling that.

The story was very well written. Perhaps as part of making sure to the reader that Greg was the good guy and blameless in the marriage being over, the writer had him hang on well beyond what was reasonable and give Jen more chances than most men, including me, would be able to stand. As effective as it is in making the point, that can be overdone.

Very sweet, and very human characters.

"It had been about an hour earlier, after returning from her usual, as of the last few months, bi-weekly on Wednesdays, long-lunch engagement" - I figured that the "long-lunch engagement" was with a lover.

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"loyal as a yard dog?" - Yard dogs aren't particularly loyal, they're just dogs that are kept outside.

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"Blackmail" - She makes the same argument that many of us make in comments on cheating wives stories where the wife claims blackmail: Don't give into it, tell your spouse.

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"events that can be made up" - Except that she apparently WASN'T making them up.

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"her and another top attorney at her firm to work closely together" - "Work" LOL!

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Even though she was obviously clueless that he knew about her affair, how could she be so self-centered as to be pissed at his cheating when she was doing the same.

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"That could get me fired." - Delivering a message could get her fired? Isn't that her job?

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She should have gotten at least a small cash settlement from the firm, say $100,000, Maybe it would have been better to give her an even better settlement, say $500K to one million, with a glowing reference so that she could simply leave the firm altogether.

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I'm a LITTLE torn on this one - Jen wasn't evil, and the marriage was already shaky on BOTH their parts. What I come down to is two things: 1) She was so angry at his apparent cheating when she was also cheating. 2) Going to the hotel room instead of just walking away.

Deception may be justifiable, but honorable?

"It said, 'Your husband is cheating on you with my fiancé.'"

Fiancé is masculine, fiancée is feminine. You had me thinking for a split second Greg bi or a closet gay.

"After seeing her brother off...

...Using her brother's phone, she tried to call Jen's office."

Hard to use his phone if he's not there. Could have avoided this mistake by omitting this unnecessary attempt to avoid identification. If Jen had been there, and Liz surely suspected that she wasn't, Liz could have easily made an excuse for the call.

"He honestly felt compassion for her, because he had difficulty turning off the love for someone he had loved for so long. But he wasn't going back. He was tired of fighting for a spot near the top of her list."

The whole story sets up the divorce but the emotional impact is lacking. The decision to cut ties with someone he loved is arrived at too simply, in two sentences that read like an epilog. I would like to have them go to counselling to they could have a final, emotional, confrontation.

I suppose a deep fake is possible but it's so far out of the norm that it seems implausable. He's trying to make her feel his pain but having the texts came from Liz, who is close to him and would know, should be sufficient to convince her they are true, and also foreshadow Liz's intentions.

Thanks for sharing.

3*

enjoyed it thoroughly, thank you!

Yes and no.

The plot was good and so was the writing.

But the wimpy way he treated his wife

during the break-up was a real turn-off.

Love comes in many forms.

One of them might be going home

to make your slut wife's favorite meals.

But to me it's just a declaration

of low self respect.

And who can admire that?

3 out of 5 from me.

I agree with xMule. However, I gave it a 4, since I liked the mechanics of the writing. Nevertheless, it was without impac, it did not convey the pain of betrayal, and always when there is a wonderful woman in the wings, it just lessens any impact of the split.

Contrived.

this story started out great and then got way to predictable could spot the ending couple of pages in to it sorry your writing is good just the the plot for me

A good story but more information about the divorce and subsequent romances would have made the story more interesting.

4 star - just a standard 'by the numbers' BTB story

Decent story but the cheaters hardly suffered.

Well done 5

Excellent story - very well written and brought along

So he exchanged a slut for a whore good luck to him.

Totally fucked up story!! Skank Liz and a manwhore

Well done. Tackled a tough subject and added a twist.

I thought some of the plot was imaginative. But the wife Jen for all her accomplishments, was completely moronic. She literally missed all the clearly telegraphed analogies and statements. Even the head of a process serving company was in the hallway! She arrive at the hotel think we'll a few more before counseling. But yeah it turns out it was meaningless, mediocre sex with a married asshole. I understand their marriage had drifted and was in trouble. And she worked closely with the guy. And that she had some sort of rationalizations based on imagined or real issues with her husband. But on that final Wednesday. After everything that happened. Why the freak did she plan to go to the hotel. Despite being career minded and accomplished attorney, she apparently has an IQ of around 70. Wtf? Then the stuff with Liz. To be honest this story would have been much interesting of the wife had an awakening, showed remorse, and they went to counselling. Then she learned about the deep fakes, etc. in due course and the husband explained why. Maybe they don't reconcile but that would have been way more entertaining.

Do lots of these Anons. have the semblance of a brain, why was Liz an whore, what did they see that I missed? Even the wife liked her before and after the divorce. I thought that it was more life like than most LW. stories on here, 5* I love this author.

She happy not mentioned in divorce and yet suddenly a settlement for not filing a sexual harassment suit?!!

BIG ERROR!!!

Also although both guilty of non communication she allowed flirting and consequences.

Flirting NEVER innocent !!!!

Don't have any friends who believe differently

4 stars - This was a basic BTB story with a few twists that gave it an extra star.

However, I found several plot holes that did not add up.

Jen 'missing' all the signs that hubby was flashing in front of her - is the most glaring.

Jen actually handing over a $10K cheque, just to get a message delivered is waaaaay beyond believable.

I mean you are talking about a lawyer here, with more than 20 years of experience, not a naive 18 year old.

There are a few more, but you probably picked up on those from reading the other comments.

Have a nice day.

I liked it

However, being so close to his assistant was a negative. Maybe it’s just me, but you don’t sleep in your assistant’s apartment for more than a night. Preferably not at all.

Other than that, the characterizations were well done, interesting, and a 4 star read

Liz is an opportunistic, manipulative woman who endured difficult circumstances while growing up that shaped her character in many ways - some admirable and others unfortunate. Her acceptance of the $10,000 was disgustingly grotesque and an extraordinary revelation of her true nature. She will always be the impoverished Russian girl searching for financial security while suspecting ruin is just around the corner. Greg could have done much better than settling for his mercenary PA as his second wife. Hopefully she eventually liked him at least as much as she did his wallet and nice vacation home.

Good story. The use of the deep fake was interesting. Both to gauge her reaction and to not make her feel beset upon if heading into counseling, where he would eventually tell the truth. Also to make her feel upset, betrayed, minimalized, unwanted. But their marriage had deeper issues with the kids having left the house 3 years earlier. Her career had taken over her priorities. A long brutal several month trial really created a rift. Her judgment was poor especially given that she started an every other week hookup with Trent on alternate Wednesdays, for some."excitement" wven though thr sex sucked snd she rarely had an orgasm. Clearly during their 8 or so trysts, having six orgasns, of which most she had to strive for suggests that Trent aucked in the sack. Hence this accomplished senior lawyer comes off as a vapid idiot. Made worse by her choice to fit a few more in before counseling. Wtf? Yes she was going to back out and tell Trent, hence her opening the door, but too little too late. Woukd have saved her marriage if she just called him from her burner phone. Greg was ready to give her a chance. She failed the test, though much closer than he thought since he expected her to continue with Trent. I get that they had drifted apart and their time together was minimized due largely to her commitment to her career, and hence she was vulnerable to temptation, but how coukd she be that dumb to trade in for poor sex with someone she didn't even really like after a while. Even more stupid iis her going to his door and knocking when a process server w a talking to her in the elevator, name dropped her connection to her husband, and then directly warned her NOT to go into the hotel room. Yes she was clueless, a pit insulted, and planned to tell off Trent, but she ignored all the trigger warnings. And paid the price. Counseling wss now off the table. She showed her true colors. Sad. I was fine with Liz, but the part about taking a $10,000 check from the wife to deliver a message and depositing said check, was crazy and demeaning her character. After the death of her second loving husband and her financial support from Greg and his partner, that came off as decidedly mercenary. Drooped it from 5 to 4 stars for me.

outstanding tale..