All Comments on 'An Innocent in Paris Pt. 08'

The way you write their journey/Marie’s path — the pace, flow, phrasing, dialogue, almost clipped scenes — mirrors the swirling, at times frightening, at times tender erotic tension that surrounds Marie and Chantal. Of course, you are creating this piece so that is deliberate, but the same storyline could be “told” in different ways; the way you have done so literally pulls the reader into the piece. Am a near hopeless romantic so my wish is for their love to prevail — after all, a rather torturous path. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Right up to when Marie resists the lure of the needle, this tale could have gone either way, soft and romantic or hard and dark. An alternative ending could be written from that point. Either way, it was a well written, excellent tale which kept the reader engaged; well done Jo! Looking forward to more from the girls; perhaps the temptations haven't all gone away.

Mig, bcc, thanks for the lovely feedback … it makes a real difference.

I think we’re all relieved that Marie didn’t succumb to the needle. That could have changed everything.

Love may prevail, but so often hurts …

xx Jo

Great story. More of the same please.

Papa! More packets to move around? More temptation?

Will we meet the owner of the BDSM shop again? Marie still has needs.

Jo, Looking forward to the further adventures of Marie. I'm sure they will retain the edge and eroticism of the first eight. Will you tie up some of the loose ends and bring back some of the past characters?

Hi bcc - working on Annie’s story … she kept Marie’s cellphone no …

Annie has lots of potential. She is half way there already. Perhaps Annie's ending should be dark while Marie's is light and love?

I look forward to Annie and her adventures.

Have re-read the 8 chapters and they dont lose their magic. You write so well and I greatly looking forward to the next adventures. There are a number of characters in the story who it will be a pleasure to meet again if that's the way it goes. Best wishes.

I hope you're still writing these great stories. You have the talent and all the ideas to take this tale to new hights. Good luck with all your future plans.