All Comments on 'An Ocean Apart'

Love it, thanks for sharing. a happy ending and a possible new story with Jake & Ani.

You have done an excellent job of crafting these two stories together.

Want to see Jake’s role as biological dad evolve, Jennifer’s love between Jake & Dalia

thrown in to conflict, and the Andrea storyline expanded.

Not enough 🌟 five will just have to do

M

Love the stories in this serie. Hoping to see more

Another winner! Thanks again for sharing. Cheers. Frankie

Intriguing storyline and more/less intriguing characters. Bit predictable which is fine, but Jake - seriously. Guess I am outlier.

love on the page

Ariel is indeed a great name for a mermaid's granddaughter. What a great story. Five stars is not enough.

TimTam

Nice up until the end. Well, the Dahlia being sooo confident and strong and cool thing was bullshit that only reinforced that he never ends up with Jenny. Then no Giselle either, but the literal rando. Lol. Gtfo with that cop out shit.

Loved the two stories in the series. Will there be more to come? Will there be any stories involving Jake and Andrea?

Two great stories. I hope that you can develop a thread that includes Jake in a poly relationship with Jake, Giselle, Jenny, Dalia, and Ari.

I can see them deciding to kiss the rest of the family goodbye with the exception of Rose accepting and even encouraging this new relationship.

I've read and even edited stories in this genre that swaps compersion for jealousy and this one begs for the same with the characters defined so far. As a side issue, does Rose want to get in the ultimate incest act?

Poor Jake, not so happy for him...always a bridesmaid never a bride. Fixing all his loved family members problems, but eventually left out in the cold in the end. Hopefully the will move on and find something for himself.

Hope your next story in this series includes Andrea. Maybe another Giselle and Jake hook up as well in Hawaii.

Loved the story, yes its a beautiful story with passion and consideration for others

You have a gift for story telling! Amazing. There were some broken English/grammatical errors laced throughout both stories but still a 5! I look forward to your future endeavors.

Two great stories, but he keeps losing the girl!!! Still 5/5 for both.

Great story. It was written beautifully. Few errors but it was great read. I write erotica and other genres. This one the best I read. Keep it up.

Please keep this little universe alive. I enjoyed both stories so much. Thank you for your amazing writing.

One of the better stories I've read in a long time. Great follow-up to "An Exercise in Fertility".

Loved it

Thanks

Great story!

I remember reading this story a while ago and I had been looking for it for months when you reposted it. I'm excited to see your comment on the first chapter that you're working on a third!

Wonderful story and writing, now I have to check out your other stories. 5 star all the way. One of the best .

THE BEACH SCENE WAS JUST OUTSTANDING! IT REALLY MADE THIS ENTIRE STORY...CINCO ESTRELLAS!

Would love to see this character continue with another adventure. Keep building this little world. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Superior storytelling. The ocean scene was spectacular with a great wrap up at the end. You won all the stars with this story. Thanks.