All Comments on 'An Unexpected Reaction'

Great story! Enjoyed the good mix of drama, love and redemption. Great imagination and solid plots to make it very interesting. You and your Muse have great imaginations and abilities to put it into your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

Really?

Warning him not to cheat, when he knows and understands the pain of getting cheated on.

It's a very good story,but that bit at the end just made his wife look like distrustful bitch.

But other than that it was an interesting read.

As much as I love this story, and have read it several times, I don't get the threat at the end. How can he prevent them being in the same room again? There will likely be other conventions and such that he'll attend,with no knowledge of whether she'll ne there or not.

Fantastic!!!! From start to finish!! LOVED this work of art!!

Yup, gave it a "5." Definitely loved this one with its many story lines and potential for future development. Good job!

What a story... 5 stars easy

Well done.

Well done.

Cuck in the making... Amanda being a pushover for dominate treatment (the roadside spanking), Amanda "talking to" a classmate for a month on the sly, Amanda enjoying strangers drooling over her public nakedness, Amanda going to church because of the cute new preacher, Amanda being sexually aggresive and domineering at the close.

TOTALLY LOVED THE STORYLINES,

Please note that I'm asking for another chapter or 2, mainly to cover John Charles and Amanda and celeste future,

Maybe cover, his later years, maybe cover Sam and Helen's later years, the vineyards future now the passing if the owners,

Maybe cover Aida's later years,

Either way, if you decide not to do it, I love the storyline as it is,

Thankyou for writing it, 10/10,

Read it again. Still 5*. Thanks for the escape.

Fourth time and this is still five stars…

great I didn't notice any mistakes.

Must be my afternoon for checking in on favorites. Easy to see why I voted five and favorited this one , thanks again

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 Love your story. But please; spellcheck, grammar, syntax and proofread.

Great story. In a very strange way, I think this helped me with my now ex-wife’s infidelity. You have a talent in story telling though, for sure.

Not to nitpick but there's one thing that confused me. Several times it's mentioned that his mom always wanted a daughter, however, early on in the story it says that the reasons he was called Jace was because his sister shortened J.C. Am I wrong and just misread it? Excellent story regardless.

Usually stories as long as this one get bogged down with too much unnecessary detail and I stop reading. This story was well done. It stayed interesting without unnecessary blather. The story was interesting with great characters. Very well done.

You write well , keep doing it.

Good one or I should say two. It was one story where he divorced his wife and another where he started all over again. Both were good.

Well done. Great story line. I felt the pain Suit was feeling, and though there are those that thought he should have acted faster, or with more violence, he e wasn't that type of guy. Good job. I Agree you need a proofer. I prefer skirts: more fun discussing sex scenes. Anyway, editing makes it easier to read. Keep writing.

XYZ

I enjoyed the story or two stories you kept into one each were very good.

IT NEEDS A CONCLUSION TO THE FUTURE OF THE STORYLINE.

A long and complicated but emotionally fulfilling and uplifting tale. Well done. Would suggest a full edit, though, to improve the weaker points as per your other commentators' suggestions.

This story had all the markings of a masterpiece. Except that there are lots of holes into it. The worse one is who is talking or telling the story? Who is referred to? What the situation is? Etc. The story might be clear in YOUR mind but you should consider the reader who is NOT in your brain and who cannot guess what you are thinking. As it stand now, it is worth a reluctant 4* for me

BJ

This is probably the 2nd or 3rd time I've read this particular story, but it's the 1st time that I've directly made the connection with "MMA Meets MBA", another excellent story by this author. Keep up the excellent work qhml1!

He got what he deserved for taking her back the 1st time.

leopards and spots and all that.

Lose the violence, the rest is excellent

All's good except for the thing, that you can't know baby's sex till the end of third month, so Amanda's line is bull**t

5 stars - I like this story a lot.

BUT please ease up on the whacking, or the squeezing of tender body parts - it really was not necessary. I am just getting on the bandwagon against violence in these Loving Wives stories - like a few of the commenters below.

Thanks again! I still love happy endings!!

Jim

Shouldn't have taken Becky back the first time.

As for the 2nd wife, also physicsal violence is a no no. What if he had squeezed her tits or pinched her clit ?!!

I think you making up for the time he spanked her atop his car. Or, were made to do so.

Those 2 things are not the same though, neither in intent nor delivery.

So, you didn't make them equal. You just made her abusive.

The only thing I didn't like was her squeezing his balls. It was totally unnecessary, and she knew it. I know it was done for humor, but wasn't funny.

Really liked it but there are two stories here. The first involves Becky and rates maybe a 3.5. The second involves Amanda and is definitely a 6.

That said, the last segment (the ball squeezing bit) really doesn't belong here and actually detracts from the overall story.

Fantastic story! Thanks for sharing this with us.

I know it looks like two installments, but I loved reading a good story that had an ending for a change. Well done. You do need someone that wears bikini panties to proof it for you, it reads better, but then again with 787 comments, I am not complaining, just an observation. Good job. Keep writing.

XYZ

Perfect story that did not need Amanda's sister!! Jace was too easy on his cheating slut wife and that part of the story could have bern reduced

BECKY WAS A SLUT FROM BEFORE MARRIAGE YET THE STUPID CUCK CUNT STILL MARRIED HER. LOSER

I couldn’t stop reading 👍

God, I was entranced. !!

THANK YOU!

This is one of my favorite LW stories here on Literotica which I re-read every now and again.

I'm really confused as to the Anon below who thinks Jace was condescending... I don't get that at all.

Yes a little longer than most but a very great story thanks for sharing

I loved your story so much the first time I read it. So I read it again. It was just as good the second time. Thanks for an enjoyable story.

Unlikable mc, can understand being pissed off as he is but he's a condescending prick.

Wonder why Becky was so fucked up? Might make a good story. D

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So well done, I'm eager for more, please don't let it die here. Very creative, descriptions were excellent, all of the people were well formed and thought out clearly. A treasure in type. I'm so glad i found this story. I have a feeling I'll be returning to it again.

Great story, well worth 5 stars. Good mix of interesting characters, nicely paced, straightforward and believable plot (the sister was a nice if minor sideline). And a real pleasure to read a story with so few errors, only a few minor typos. Good work.

Love it.

COME ON, PLEASE DO NOT LET IT END HERE.

TO BE CONTINUED!!!

Good tale but it seemed like two stories for the price of one. He marries and divorces a skank. Moves away. Then his second story and life begin.

Oh yes. I wish I could have been that lucky. I experienced the first part but not the second.

great story. Well written. Thank you.

I just finished rereading this story. I found it refreshing, satisfying, and authentic. You wove the threads of the well-drawn characters together very neatly with no loose ends. I also want to commend on your proofreading and editing. I usually download the stories to edit them to my satisfaction (I may be a little OCD about that) and too often it is a monumental task, but I couldn’t spot any grammatical mistakes and only a few typos. That makes reading way more pleasurable.

Nice work.

This was a real gem. I laughed, I cried, I dribbled snot down my shirt. The only thing missing from this emotional roller coaster was a wood track. Thank you for this rare gem. You even polished it up nicely so it shined bright enough for so many people to notice it, read it, and comment on it.

A tearjerker, pressed all my buttons.

Story was great but unfinished.

Lee k. 40 miles east of Okeechobee.

Agreed it should have been two installments. The first was worth a 3 (or a 3.5) while the second was worth a 5 (the system won't let me give it a 6). But there was no need for the "ball squeezing" scene at the end - it seriously detracted from the story (and that's being polite)

This is a great story. Loved it

I actually wanted him to hook up with Aida in the end. Still a good story.

Excellent story!

10/10!!!!!

Suberb story, very well done.

I share the view of the commenter who said that this should have been two separate stories but I found the drama of Jace's marriage and breakup with Becky far more compelling a read than the meandering tale of his getting together with Amanda. In fact, the best part of the 'Amanda Story' for me was when Jace had his final showdown with Becky.

Didn't like Amanda assaulting Jace like that. That was uncalled for and not humorous at all especially after she admitted hearing everything Jace said. Jace cannot control when or where his ex-wife will show up. He did everything right by rebuffing the ex's advances.

Maybe Jace needed to give Amanda an object lesson by grabbing both of her nipples and pinching them very, very hard. Without letting go and tears streaming down her eyes, he lets her know the deal. "Hurts like hell doesn't it? What you did to me hurt like hell too and you did it twice. You sexually abused me because my ex came up to me. I rejected her advances outright and you know that. Yet, you thought it was funny to cause me pain almost to the point of passing out and abuse my testicles. If you ever think about doing again, junior will end up in a broken family and still may. Do you understand? Well, do you?" She cries out after Jace pinches harder. After letting go, he grabs his car keys and tells her to think about what she did. She can call him to apologize let him know if she if going to be a decent human being instead of a sick person who delights in causing her husband pain for being an honorable man. If not, she can expect divorce papers.

She has little time to decide. Until then, he will stay away from her because he does not want to be in position to protect himself from unwarranted attacks. The choice is hers. Regardless, she needs get counselling pronto to figure out what is her major malfunction to do what she did.

Unfortunately, the authors unfortunate ending cost my rating of the story from a solid five to a so-so three. It's best not to crap all over a decent with a BS ending.

For those who think what I suggested was over the top, ask yourself why sexual assault against a man is acceptable. At least what the man did was in response to her abuse.

Wow! After reading some of the critiques, I thought they were for a different story. A wimp?I don’t think they would have been satisfied even if he had killed his first wife. Go figure. Keep writing in this genre. Great job!

Definitely should have been two stories. The first was "ok" (a 3.5 maybe) while the second was superb (definitely a 5).

One of my absolute favorite stories here. I just read it again for the third time!

This is undoubtedly the BEST story I have read on here! Thank you.

And ignore the negative fools. Some how, which amazes me, they forget it's fiction.

Again, excellent story!

WIMP OF A HUSBAND, SAW HER TRUE COLOURS B4 MARRIAGE YET STILL MARRIED THE SLUT AND AFTER GETTING EVIDENCE OF HER CHEATING HE CHOSE TO NOT GOT SCORCHED EARTH ON THE BITCH!! WEAK WIMP HUSBABD

Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent with us. I truly loved your story. Couldn't stop reading once I started. Please continue sharing and releasing any new stories you write. I know they will be as fully developed and fleshed out as this one. Your characters were relatable. Excellent writing from beginning to end. Again, thank you.

This was exceptionally good. It was so good that while was reading about his second life, I had completely forgotten about his first.

I would have informed Amanda that I hate Physical violence .. They want to have kids and She is trying to his Nuts off of Him .. Time to give her the talk that next time She Grabs My Balls or Dick and try to rip them off I will leave as fast as I can . She would get only one warning .

Amanda is just about my favorite character on this site. There are a few other that are close, but I would have loved to find an Amanda in my real life.

One thing I can't understand In these stories are the amount of Loving Wives that profess to still love their betrayed husband. I almost would prefer her to just be a flaming bitch.

Read this three times now, love it

From the break up to finding Amanda

5 stars easily

still like this story, one of my favorites, sort of short on the devastation of a cheating, clueless spouse and long (a good long) on many people of good morals and character.

This story just gets better the second time. Thans for your fine efforts.

This guy is a really good writer.

Beautiful.

My second time reading this.

It’s still a 5 star read.

Bill S.

I'm certain I've read this before, but it was definitely worth another read!

@AngelRider you are intitled to your views, I see you always wanted to be a writer. Well why not write a story of your OWN and show us how it is done. Each person who writes does it differently. Just because you do not agree with how a person writes does not mean that everyone agrees with you. I doubt you will read this because you received a mouthful of vomit reading this before. If you do not like a story that's fine. That Jace had gotten Celeste to be HONEST with him and wanted her to be HONEST with Amanda most likely went right past you. That he was using it to bond them all closer together was beyond your grasp. That is surprising with your background. But again write your own story then you can control all the details. This story has a 4.78 rating with 2100 people adding it to favorites. 1.8 million readers. So clearly there are a lot of people that enjoyed the story. The writers here are not b professionals, They share their work freely. So again if you think you know how to write a better story feel free.

qhml 1 be true to yourself and thank you for your stories.

Great story, always hope when you think there's none

Sappy as fuck. I received a mouthful of vomit over this:

"Our child is growing up, honey. She did something bad, got caught, came home, and told me all about it. I truly believe she understands what she did, and is sorry. I'll let her tell you about it. Here."

It's so saccharine. I hate scenes like this. They aren't real. It's disney shit. Too many romance writers fancy themselves Nicholas Sparks 2.0 and think because his sister did actually find a decent guy when she was dying, all the rest of the unbelievable bullshit is possible. It's not. Or at least, scenes like this do not happen the way they are portrayed. I might accept, your sister is finally coming around. Your sister is figuring out life isn't what she thought. How you presented it missed poodle skirts and a backtrack of orchestral instruments.

still a great story

Loved this,

Excellent, well done.

Don't know why the negativity on some of posts, personally I liked it. Well written and I couldn't stop reading it. Good job

Stop reading on page 5. It's easily a four.

The second part is just gross. Easily a 1.

Have to agree this should have been two stories. The first half was a four (barely) while the second half was an easy five (couldn't give a higher mark tho)

5 * for the second part, although I would have given 4 to the first part!

Very good. It hit close to home for me. Ex cheated on me thought she was pregnant with his child. He divorced his wife. 53 yrs later the boy contacts me and tells me I'm his Father.

loved it !!

An extremely interesting and thought provoking story.

Well prepared and written, with both humour and pathos.

This story's heroine compares favorably with another story called The Harpy. Both had a little crazy about them, but would be fiercely loyal to a man who loves them.

Quality writers like Q really ruin the curve when trying to decide ratings - kind of like the smart, straight A girl in the front row in school.

So many well-deserved comments from fellow fans of your writing, the funny rants are from the obvious 'cheating slut Beckys' in the crowd.

My only complaint is that the last sentence of your tales come far too soon - thank you Q.

somewhere east of Omaha

Great story!

I love rereading this story, its one of my favourites.

If only all us divorcees were as good as the man in your story, there would not br many 3rd or 4th marriage in this pitiful world

This story should be made into a movie.

Wow. A FANTASTIC read. Would love another part. So well written and really grabbing. Read it all on 1 go. FANTASTIC.