All Comments on 'An Unexpected Weekend Out of Town'

I like the bones of this plot, but it is more of an outline than a story. The sudden addition of the wife to make it a threesome seems out of left field, no hint that either woman would be open to that, or that she would be fine with her husband cheating on her. Keep writing, it's the best way to get better.

There are the rough bones of a good story here but it needs so much help to be more than three stars for me.