by Asstastic
Very well written, but if I was going to offer one critique it would be I found the story a bit too long. Personal preference thing.
...for taking the time to offer feedback. It's funny you mention the length because I was wondering if I had tried to cram too much in at one time. There's still more introduction that has to happen so I agree with you and duly noted.
I belive the length (of the story) is good. Please continue.
I have really enjoyed this and hope you continue. My title says it all.
Knowing my limitations as far as creativity and imagination, I might as well tell you now, part two is gonna be a let down by comparison. Not intentionally of course but I just can't imagine high praise like that back to back. I'll do my best, but...