by QSQuinn
Incredible story. I really enjoyed these characters and their relationship.
5stars.
I rather liked it. I saw no issues with the details. Personally, I always ignore comments from anonymous people. I thought it was hot, & had a great pace to it as well. I'd be interested to see if it goes anywhere else should you choose to continue.
Beautiful.
I love the mix love, lust and humour... and the imagery.
Well done.
I quite enjoyed the story also. Any Chance you could be convinced to add more to these characters. Follow the twins through college and afterwards?
Excellent. Hope to see more from you
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Really good story that felt almost real. Loved the good-natured, Sorkin-esque intelligent banter that breathed life into the characters, and made the sex part both intimate and fun!
The only adjustments I would have made were a bit more specific on some aspects of physical description, and perhaps something else sexy before plunging straight into anal.
Tried to give you 5 stars but they wouldn't change color! Loved this and look forward to more from you!
Great story. Gave it 5-stars. My only constructive criticsm was since you rarely mentioned the brother's name, it was a little confusing who was talking at the beginning. You mentioned 'Georgie' repeatedly but it took you halfway down the first page before you mentioned 'John'. Other than that, the dialog during the sex scene didn't seemed forced and ridiculous like a lot of other stories posted on Lit.
The way you described Georgie painted a mental picture of Autumn Falls.
Really enjoyed this story and hope you do more to continue it into John and Georgie’s life at college.
Really nice premise.
Nicely full of details. Good step-by-step action.
Five stars.
Great story!! Needs mire between them!!
REALLY STUPID TO PURPOSELY SEPARATE TWINS FROM THE TIME THEY'RE BABIES!! IDIOT PARENTS
Great build up of the story, and I loved the trial and error approach of the twins, I agree with several of the other’s comments that we need to read more about them in collage
What does one say about siblings...twins...who love each other, and love each other up, so nicely, other than "Oh, My!!" Not just sex, but emotional attachment, shared by siblings, especially twins, which binds them together.
This is the type of story I really look forward to finding...and an author who knows "how" to write...
Thank You...and Five**5**Stars!!
Now this was a nice story! When she whispered in his ear, I was right there in John's place! Very good indeed. Five stars!!
I really think you should continue this story with the two of them off at college! Please?
I feel like they should have been together far earlier and experienced all their firsts together, especially given how stupidly close they were since like birth. It just felt like a perfect setup that was then ruined a bit by having others involved before their realization to be together. Maybe that's just me though.
Good premise.
Too automatic re sex.
And you wrote VICE when you meant VISE.
Four stars.