by SEAWATER1
Close bond with Ben? Loves him, thought of him first? Yet she fucks Luke first and most.
No, not hot at all. If it's gonna be a hot story, everyone fucking everyone else, then make it so. I have no problem with that at all, and when done right, it can be very, very hot. Instead, you introduced history and feelings towards Ben, why? Made this a very mediocre story.
I am always happy to see a story by you. I love the progression and a way you always find to add a special little kick of kink.
A hot, enjoyable read. The story progresses nicely and the sex is believable. Your lead character is great but her brothers are a little undefined, though their backgrounds are well drawn. This was a great story, and I'd love to see what further adventures these three could have.
Loved it how progressed slowly. Can not wait for chapter two. Yes she fucks Luke first. But when Luke moves out with his girlfriend, Ben will be come her lover. Hope it progresses that way. 5 stars.
I liked how the up-tight sister loosened up during the week. I also am hoping there will be a follow-up chapter. Loved the pacing.
I really enjoyed this story and hope there will be more chapters!!!
It was well written, great theme and very believable.
Keep up the good work.
A Very Good Compelling Story Till The End ............................
I enjoyed the story was wondering why the other couple didn't get involved of course since they were fugitives might have been dangerous anyway maybe some continued playing !
Well I packed it in right after the faggy twins started jacking each other off in the tent. Total. Fucking. Turnoff. If I'd been sister I'd have stayed to read when they headed off for their next day's hike, then packed my shit and left their asses there. I'd have been skeptical anyway as to why they wanted to drag their sister who has no interest in camping anyway way out in the middle of nowhere. Hmmm... Lemne think... And who the fuck over the age of sixteen jacks off in the tent with family in there?! I'm sure the story had lots of good stuff but I couldn't get past the annoying turnoffs. (Not to mention the creeper neighbors)
Leaving the queer male sibling activity aside for starters, the sudden swerve into slutty porn dialog was out of place with the whole familial bonding adventure you were supposedly building. She's too shy to take her top off, then she trading porn banter during frantic free sexual acts with both boys in a tent in the space of a few days. Not too likely.
Why waste the readers' time with the other couple then not really do anything substantial with them? If they were murderous maniac fugitives, then they too are shown as quite out of character, so more garbage.
LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!! Unlike most of the stories on here this was believable. If I could I would rate this as a ten. The best I have read here. Hope the rest of your stories are like this .
I LOVED IT!!! LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVED IT!!!!!!!! you should write a book!! id buy!!!
Well this story was amazing. Truly one of the best stories on this site, sorry I ready many stories every night so I have read a lot. Very well written in story. Putting a story to it rather the just sex. You have a talent for writing.
An excellent story with a good blend of sexual activities. Best I've read in quite some time. There is, however, an inconsistency. Upon arriving at the campsite, the brothers announce, "You can't get a vehicle here," Ben pointed out. "It's too rough for cars. Thankfully," added Luke.
Then, after they break camp, vehicles start showing up! Ahh, the brothers were just kidding their sister, right?
This story reminds me so much of all the years ago when I used to go camping with my cousins, 2 sisters and 2 brothers. We did just about everything you have described in this story, and never regretted it for a single moment.
Five star. Really a good and detailed story, only combo I missed was Ben and Luke doing oral on each other or wanking each other off while Lucy sat on their faces.
This is one of the best stories on the site. 5 stars. Wish I could give it 10.
Brilliant story. Hard throughout with boxers soaked with pre cum. Haven't cum so hard for ages.
More, this sounds so believable! It actually sounds a whole lot like when I was growing up, and events that took place with several family members that I will not name, because it was all real.