All Comments on 'Andrea & Jack Ch. 01'

Draws you in quickly! ....but then is able to hold your attention. This could be one of the good ones.

The way they started was fine but you added too much information at the end. I know you want to add more chapters, but you should have left the fact that they had more sisters for later. This chapter would have stood on it's own.

I'll read on to see what develops.