All Comments on 'Andy'

It needs a part 3

Much, much better than divorce, but it's STILL an unfinished story.

Your world allows females no opportunity to learn and accept responsibility for their errors.

What needs a lesson. She's a spoiled little bitch. Ghosting for a year is perfect. If she really wants to be contrite, she pays.

Let us follow along and see if there's any real character under that skirt

Oh come on. Half of this followup is just the same events and words copy-pasted from the last story, and the actual ending the last one was missing barely makes an appearance here either. If trolling, then successful. Otherwise, no.

Reading to refresh before reading Rim's sequel. Hope he burns this bitch.

"She did in fact have a steady boyfriend, but she broke up with him when I started dating here." - How come she didn't tell us that in her story?

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The dialog setting up the first date is different. I suppose we can chalk that up to two different recollections.

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"That way if she was denied she wouldn't be able to get home before I left." - She likely already has her return ticket.

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"She did in fact have a steady boyfriend, but she broke up with him when I started dating here." - How come she didn't tell us that in her story? She didnt think it was necessary.

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The dialog setting up the first date is different. I suppose we can chalk that up to two different recollections. Ahh you figured it out all by yourself.

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"That way if she was denied she wouldn't be able to get home before I left." - She likely already has her return ticket. I don't think he was worried about her ticket, more like any purchase she made would likely cause her to wonder why.

Unfinished, just like the previous story"Shayla". Would have been good if it wasn't left hanging, in fact a five star story but such as it is, 3*s.

That's it?

I've read lots of your stories but you just give up on so many of them them as if you lose interest and move on to the next idea, if you won't put the effort in, I simply can't be bothered anymore.

I come here to read a story, not half of one where I'm supposed to fill in the blanks myself.

An empty apartment and just gone. That's hardcore. But I REALLY wanted to read about her reactions when she got home. REALLY REALLY!

This is a story I don't like because it is only the start of a story. Where is the rest of the story???? Nice beginning but ahhh wheres the rest?????

A little disappointed to have to wait for the story when Shayla entered the Apartment!! Hope comes soon. Love your work

Yeh I agree with you to bad you didn’t write the Shayla reaction. Without it the story was more a “Bragging” fest with absolutely no payoff for us readers. Some writers write for themselves others for the reader.

Come on Bob. As suggested by others, this is at best half of a story. I always expect better from you.

Shayla needs a sequel.n

This is his side.

We need to see, experience the anguish if her coming up against the consequences

He Ghosted her. In my opinion this is a far better revenge than divorce.

Not many writers do it. There should be more. But hardly anybody stays for the shock and awe.

You set this up beautifully. Now give us the next year, for both of them

We get to to see everything the guy feels here...and that's all...He does put her in the right place...He's gone...but the story here is her Cheating...when his story ends...His wife story should begin...but it doesn't...

Beautiful

No ending,the bane of being a fan of JPB.

sorry can't rate half a story with no end

Come on man, how about ending a story. A great story, but a terrible ending. You just left us hanging.

Just started to read your stories. We have a “writer” who thinks it’s cute to leave his work up in the air, believing this is the sign of a cutting edge author. Your not!

1 Not finished had a good start fell way short

Good except that I wanted to have you describe Shayla's face and her actions. Unfinished.

Have to agree with some of the comments, this story especially deserves a follow up / finish

Good story otherwise, but I really felt let down

WTF? Write an ending.

Why write two parts to a story and not write an ending? What a huge waste of your time writing it and the rest of ours, reading it.

Most of the story is a repeat of the conversations. You can skip right to the last page.

Excellent pan. Really like emptying the apartment

What a devious plan. Thanks for your writing.

That is some serious scorched earth! I like it. No argument, no pleading, no discussion, and none needed.

This is almost an exact copy of the Shayla. What was the point?

Incomplete, it still needs to be finished.

5***** for this part, I really liked it.

2 stars - the guy is a pathetic wimp and the SLUT is a brainless bimbo.

Well, this didn't add much to part 1 (Shayla), now did it? Where's the rest?