All Comments on 'Angel Ch. 01'

Could do with a bit of tightening up - silly typos, and sometimes repetitive use of language, but overall a good and arousing tale. Particularly interesting in that it was written from her persepctive, and for me at least this was done more convincingly than male writers usually manage. Thank you

I like it. The characters are still vague at this point so I hope this will be devloped further. But Chapter 1 is off to a great start!