All Comments on 'Ann & Ben's Other Seduction'

Next time, read it before submitting.

I agree with the "too many typos", the most annoying of which was the continual confusing of Ben and Bev. Next time, pick names which are more contrasting, so that you don't get them mixed up.

Hey!

Don't worry about the typeo's we both

knew what you meant. Sue and I love your stories.

Can we borrow your wife? Or would you like to borrow Sue?

Ed (and Sue)......

Overall, I thought the storyline had a good plot, as well as decent buildup. Unfortunately, I thought the transitions could have been more smoothly arrived at; some were a bit too direct (all or nothing... "everyone into the pool"). Also, watch your character associations in your story, as on a few occasions you placed Bev's name where clearly Ben should have been written in.

I would suggest having someone proofread the materials prior to publishing (could catch what we many times miss due to over-familiarization of material).