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Anonymous4 months ago

Nice premise.

Good scene setting.

You could use an editor/proofreader. You wrote, for example: "the nurse asked if I was ok with her taking a few swap samples as well." SWAB is what you meant.

Numerous others too.

Sex needs more details. And dialog during it.

Four stars.

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