by lesbian_luvr
Put this into satire/humor and you'd have an excuse for how terrible this is.
What a foolish writer. This guy is super sick
Its so damn frustrating when as a serious writer you get picked apart for random stupid shit and utter CRAP like this gets published...just ugh!
~R.
You've had your fun; you're a published author. Now it's time to get on with your life's work.
It's all sex. Where is the emotion and story? Hops from day to day just about the sex. What else do they do on this trip? Really? It's boring and so... I'm lost for words.
What load of dude-trash. Really? Written like a Jack and Jill story. No imagination, no depth. Dude, go write a stupid incest or bdsm fantasy because your idea of lesbian sex is childish and plain stupid. The first paragraph had me laughing but this isn't a comedic piece, it's just stupid male-driven crap. 1 star is beong generous.