All Comments on 'Annia'

Please write more on this!!!

a continuation is needed. pleaaaaasssssseeeee.

I know it's going to be a lovely story. Please before posting chapter 2, check for typos, i've read a lot of stories with typos without getting distracted but yours distracted me a lot. Waiting for next chapter.

Thanks

It caught my interest and now I cant wait for next chapter....continue it please. thank you :-)

to post the rest.

Please write another chapter, it's very good!! :)

POST THE REST I LOVE IT ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ it sounds like it's gonna be a real good series

The story is an intriguing beginning, but the typos and language use was really distracting. Fixing those small problems will make your stories even stronger.

I gave 4 stars for the the story line which is good so far, but there are lots of spelling and grammatical errors. Please find an editor. You will find many good ones on this site that are willing to help. Good luck.

please continue!

L

Lazy writing deserves no rewards. Regardless of the story, your writing is careless and undisciplined. You insult the art of storytelling by posting a story rife with soelling and grammatical errors. Shame on you for being so careless and lazy.

Waiting for the rest of the story. The story plot is good, language is also alright. But it definitely needs some editing and proofreading. Hope you can find help with those. Keep up the good work

This has the potential to be great story, please continue 😊

Loved it! Love the plot. I'm willing to take the red pill down the rabbit hole to see where the story leads. I see you're a new comer to the site - welcome. Despite the one particular nasty comments, please stay encouraged and continue writing. Overall, you will find nice people on the site willing to give constructive criticism and just praise. Hang in there and many of us will be waiting for chapter 2.

This is good. There were some errors there, but i don't much mind it, I was mentally correcting it myself. No biggie-- the story is great, though indeed an editor can help you best..goodluck!

good story and start hoping the next one is longer and more detailed thanks can't wait for more

Wow, you got one really negative comment. Don't let that deter you because I've been slammed much worse on this site after posting a story. This is a good and I'm looking forward to more. I do agree that an editor is always helpful but it can be overwhelming at first, not knowing who to choose to help with your story, but please keep writing. This is good and you're brave.

Get yourself a good editor, and this will be a great story. Two thumbs up

Love it....my imagination is running wild...great story line..keep up the good work! Oh yeah, more plz;)

I want to read more!! so FUCKING!! interesting!! I really love it can't wait any longer!!!

This is good. Please continue!

"You insult the art of storytelling by posting a story rife with soelling and grammatical errors. Shame on you for being so careless and lazy. "

Irony much? If you're going to bitch at someone for spelling you could at least spell that word right.

Author, more please

I really enjoyed this story looking forward to the next part

Like your story line. Keep developing this story. Can't wait til Annia discovers her savior is her CEO and the lovemaking begins. Steamy hot I hope.

Great story- I hope you continue, I'm hooked now. :)

I'm just guessing but this story reads as if English is a second language for you. If I'm right, then you have an excuse for the exceptionally poor grammar and spelling throughout. If you are going to continue this story, I recommend that you find a good editor. If I'm wrong and English is your first language, then I'm afraid that you really have a lot to learn before you try to make it as a writer.

I'm in love with this story! I'm hoping you'll continue it!

I do hope you will continue your wonderful piece of work. Please don't let hateful comments deter you. If they have a problem with any errors then they can find something else to read. However, I will read whatever comes next!

Thank you for the time and energy you put into this story!

-B

I've seen those other comments and they may be correct... I'm not sure if the shifting tense and odd (autocorrected?) word choices are the problem or if some of the scenes really are leaking the tension from the story. Hard to tell, but a proof reading and some editing help would definately help.

But there is some general sloppiness as well. The problems of an unedited manuscript are one thing, but; "one toast with butter in her mouth and a cup of water in the other?" Ack!