All Comments on 'Annie'

Good read even though there are some words and letters of words missing, even though some of the phrases or sentences are so mundane.

The end starting "Then Jenny had a baby boy"...should be removed...it cuts all the passion, all the sex from the story..Too bad.

I couldn't finish this story. Why? Your format is incomprehensible and frustrating. One sentence does not always make a paragraph. Go back and give it another try.

I was a little disappointed that Annie didn't become pregnant, and give Paul another child, and perhaps several more children before he made himself sterile

Other than that, it was a really hot and erotic story, thanks

The story has a good premise and some imaginative intrigue and intimacy, but the sentence structure, paragraph structure, and spelling are far inferior to the norm on the Literotica site. Also, the plot becomes a bit incredible, perhaps in youthful or amateurish exaggeration. And many of the pronoun references are quite indefinite, making it difficult to decide who is referenced by a “his/him/her.”

I hope that qualitywheat will get an editor and/or study English a bit more.

in doing so adjust to the relationship. TK U MLJ LV NV

Sure did get me in to MIL stories !!!

Great story line, but it was ruined by the structure, such thait it was too hard to read or finish

You hit twelve on the zero to five sexual intensity level monitor !!! And you exhibited wonderful wordsmithing skills throughout. Thank you.