All Comments on 'Anonymous Encounter'

Because of common errors that occur when writing your stories quality went down. It lacks any "real" detail, and when you do use detail it's not described correctly. Like, for instance, when you said that you "go to your toy box that has a strap on." It implies that it has a "built in strap on" which is not what I think you meant. Another thing is when you said she rolled you two over and was now on top. Then she came and collapsed onto you, then you rolled off of her? That doesn't make sense. I also think that your story is to fast pace, which also takes away from its quality. Also try fleshing out the characters...

Wait what?! Omg that giant cliffhanger at the end😍😘😍😘 literally need more