All Comments on 'Another Night Out Ch. 01'

Don't write anymore. You can't spell for shit. Your grammar is 2nd grade level. This story wasn't worth reading past the 4th paragraph.

I disagree with the last users post. KEEP WRITING. I am guessing this was your first story. First and foremost, reread and edit you work. When you think its good, hand it off to someone else to edit and once their done, then post it.

I like the idea and I hope to read more.

I couldnt get past the first few lines. You need to think about your audience and use normal names that are easy to say and think about or you lose the audience right away like me. Zeek? Wtf? Ezikiel? wtf.. come on.

I'm enjoying where it's heading. Please write more!

I didn't get past the first paragraph. "When his walked threw my front door the first night I met him, He was quite tipsy." This is improper English on either side of the Atlantic. It should be: "When he walked through my front door the first night I met him, he was quite tipsy." Take some remedial English courses, please.

Finish the story - definitely need a 2nd and 3rd chapter. You need someone to proof your story. A lot of verbs and pronouns were missing. Really liked the story but had to read it carefully to understand what you wanted to say.

Good start. I would love to find out what happens next!!

Way too many simple spelling mistakes. Supprised auto correct not picking up the mistakes