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All Comments on 'Another Wintry Night'

by Jax_Teller

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AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Show, don't tell

Try using quotation marks around dialogue.

Also, proofreading is important.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Edit edit edit! And edit again!

Nice story line, but nowhere ready to be published. Tenses are not right often. There is no difference between direct and indirect speech. And some things just don‘t work out and need to be improved.

DianeRedfernDianeRedfernover 1 year ago

Very hot, sexy, enjoyable and surprising. I'd love a sequel

sg1010sg1010about 1 year ago

A VERY ENJOYABLE READ !

THANKS !

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