Anything Goes Pt. 05

What, no comments except criticism? I thought it was a hot next chapter, and I personally enjoy the rat-a-tat-tat of short chapters. My only regret is that there was no exquisite teasing dialogue in this offering, but I'm sure there will be more of that soon. I think her slight guilt over her infatuation with the fantasy of interracial impregnation was handled well, and I suspect there'll be more of that, too? But honestly, I think the hottest little quirk in this segment was her acknowledgment of the eroticism that Tre had been paid (by her husband) for this little encounter...

Great so far and five stars. A few understandable typos of the their/there, your/you're type. You think of the right word, you hear the word in your head, and your fingers type the word they hear you thinking, but it sounds just like that other word. Gonna happen without the kind of proofreading these stories rarely receive. A couple of others that are near kin of those: elude (hide or escape) for allude (refer to), and similar. Again, there's no doubt that you know the correct word, were it not for the sound-similar word sneaking down into your fingers. And you got the past tense of the verb "to lead" right! For all of you who get it wrong (not THIS author), the past tense is spelled "led," not "lead." The word "lead" that rhymes with red/dead/bread is a noun that means a heavy metal, or the graphite in your pencil, not the past tense of a verb.

Legit criticism. I kinda regret writing it but also know sometimes folks say stupid shit that seems out of character.

The last line of this story is completely out of charact for Tre, ruined it for me.