All Comments on 'April and Her Friends Ch. 04'

You have a good story, but you’re missing a huge piece: no discussion either between or of Carolyn, Kumar & April regarding Kumar going to a party w/three new, young, beautiful women and what could (and obviously did) occur. Also, Kumar is portrayed as a sensitive, intelligent man. What man like that wouldn’t worry about fucking up the possibly incredible situation he seems to have fallen into with April & Carolyn? Everybody is coming off in this part as very two-dimensional. And yet you’re doing a better job in other parts of the story to show us that they’re not that way. The story is coming off feeling very uneven because of that.