All Comments on 'April Fools Day Ch. 01'

Excellent first story. I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

Loved the story in every regard. Arousing and excellently presented. Looking forward to more; thanks.

Really good, especially for a first effort. Looking forward to reading more from you.

Although I just left a comment, after I read your other comments, I felt I should add this. I know publishing your first story can make you feel anxious, and a little uncertain of your abilities as a writer -- at least until you get some feedback, hopefully positive. And anyone who bashes a writer, especially a new one, just for the sake of being nasty should be ignored. Carry on writing, assuming there will always be trolls who have to get their two cents worth to feel important. This is my two cents worth, and I hope you take it to heart. Oh, and I couldn't find any obvious errors in this very well written story that I thoroughly enjoyed.

“Karen’s and my next date.” I’s is not a word.

Nice to see the "payback" as it were. What a fitting "catch 22" Jennifer has: she can't post her photos of the embarrassed Gerald without embarrassing herself. Good for Gerald, as he is in line for more "lessons" from Karen!

Very good first story, hope there's more to cum. Four solid stars, really about a 4.3 but Lit won't let us do that. Hoping for more Gerald stores.

First effort? Hard to believe you're new to this. Great story well told. Trust there is more to come.

Nice one looking forward to the next.

Nice work. Very well written. I like the revenge set up. Hope there’s more stories about Gerald and his Karen(s).

write I's in a sentence. It does not exist.

I'd like to say to everyone how much I appreciate the positive feedback I've received. I'm also very happy so much of you enjoyed my first attempt. Thank you!

Helluvanopener

One grammatical error I spotted but nowhere near the number that would spoil what is a fascinating first story.

The age difference is significant but that doesn't matter here nor would it matter if you took it forward into another story where, for example, Gerald used his computer skills to get the evidence that Karen's husband is cheating on her, get her divorce while they continue their affair knowing that they will separate once he goes to college. Just a thought.

Great job, great first story.

Loved it, even though the story did rely on Gerald having oversized tackle.

****That was a entertaining story. Thanks for sharing.

Terrific!