by Samuelx
You put way too much emphasis on race, religion, and country of origin in your stories that have nothing to do with character or plot. It identifies more about you and your hang ups than the characters in your story. I see in this story I see you attempted dialog, but still don't get the idea that each speaker starts a new paragraph and the spoken words should be in quotation marks. " "
I've gotta give it to you , you are by far the worst author ever, but you keep on truckn. You probably do it terrible on purpose atleast I hope.
Okay, so the author isn't exactly skilled at writing stories. However, I would disagree that "too much" emphasis was placed on race, religion, and country of origin. As an Arab Muslim woman who fell in love with a black man, I would say those details are very important, not so much to me as to the people in my life who have killed something so beautiful for me: my parents. You can talk when you're in the same position, otherwise you should try to be a bit more empathetic.