All Comments on 'Ardent'

Apart from your surprise [i.e., unexpected] ending, which I have to say was a tour de force by any standards, and made me want to cry, I have to compliment the writer on being the first person ever, in several years, that I have read on this medium, to write a piece that - as far as I remember - contains not a single grammatical error. There is some dubious vocabulary - check the difference between jealousy [this is mine and you can't have it] and envy [I wish I had what you've got], for example - but in general, this was a beautiful and engaging story, well-written, and perfectly planned. I shall search eagerly for other work by this author, and I look forward to many hours of future enjoyment. Thank you so much for all this pleasure.

Very well developed and related. R

An engaging read with well developed characters and a bittersweet ending. Nicely done.

Your two stories are both beautifully done . Why have you stopped writing. You are one of the few wonderfully original writer on this site. Please consider writing another story or two.

60 Year old George

but, why did they stay away so long, if he really loved her, he would have moved to atlanta. too many holes in this story, they meet and tell each other they love each other, then without telling him anything, she suddenly asks him to give her away at her wedding, this doesnt make sense. if not for this i would have given it a 100. i see this a lot in stories on literotica, the author lays everything out good for 75% of the story, but the last part he really gets into a hurry to end it, so much as it really hurts the story

realistic... sad and beautiful... bliss and torture

Shes to smart, shes to intelligent, shes to sexy, I'm just a dumb ass. She loves me and I am too stupid to know it. Sorry folks I dont get off on woulda been, coulda been, now get on with life stories.

I had read this story before and did not intend to comment on it, but reading the last one's, I want to. Isn't life made of could-would-shoud situations. It's not always about missed opportunities, it's also about those grasped and choices made. I don't think the author rushed the ending, it was in the making. Her higher drive to excell, her decision to accept the Atlanta offer without discussing it with him, the long periods without contact save the few episodes in between, the circle of "intellectuals" and his admitted failing to understand what she was talking about ... Not that I think he was less intelligent, his perception and view on things was just different. They may have lasted a long time if he had married her, but at some point in time, I think, it would have given reason for conflicts and eventually a possible breaking up. I think the author has written an excellent story, has pictured the characters very well all along and deserves the maximum for it. Thank you REgade. G.Belgium

Thank you for writting a wonderful story. Now I will have to read the rest of your stories.

I hate it when I get involved with reading a wonderful story and then the ending is not something that I particularly like. If I can understand the ending, it can still be all right. But this one, I not only don't like, but I don't understand. Her choice, his reaction to it . . . I guess I'm not sophisticated enough to follow the progression. But I do know what I like and this is not it.

Loved the story, Hated the ending.

I wanted to give this story a 5, but that is reserved for stories I read over and over. The ending to this tale was such a bummer that I have no desire to revisit the experience.But, truly an excellent tale.