All Comments on 'Are These Things Planned Somehow? Ch. 01'

I stopped reading at the public beach shower. I'd read it before. Long ago. Here.

The '...Cat't you & your girlfriend shower together..." part was the trigger. (loose quote yes, but you get the idea.

She said someone else knows that they would sleep together. Who? When a person is having an orgasm it is cum or cumming, just fyi. Great story!!! I hope there are more chapters.

This was a great story. I really enjoyed it. Next time, proof read a little longer, you might be able to catch some of the smaller spelling or grammatical errors. But hey I'm no English teacher. I really hope you continue this, maybe a few months or years down the road.

great build up and very sexy action. More please, what happens from here? Can they not resist each other and run away to live as a couple and make babies.

This was well written.

Gradual build-up and lot of emotion.

You have a well-developed vocabulary and a good sense of proper use. Yes, some typos and minor errors, but those are correctable.

Five stars from me as I really enjoyed your story. Strictly it should have been four as there are several mistakes. Give it a proof read and edit and it will be worthy of the five.

Great reading. Conveyed desire and personal attachment. Really well written.

I was there with you both and enjoyed everything as you did.

Thank you for a well thought out story- never mind the Grammar/Spelling Police. Where are THEIR submissions? However, on Page 3, you have this paragraph that reads: "We had been in the surf late morning, shopping for trinkets in the afternoon, crab legs and beer for dinner outdoors at a small seaside cafe. Our conversation inconsequential. A little nervousness and long silences between us, being our last night before heading home - and that she had masturbated her 'SON' just this morning." A Freudian Slip, perhaps? I look forward to reading the rest of the series. Again, thank you.

I loved meeting you on chat and I loved our play, I am hoping for more soon. I am loving your story it’s making isolation so much more enjoyable, thank you xx

Who knew that they would sleep together. Great Tease ! ! !

A phenomenal read one of the best I’ve read Here in a long time

Found the characters believable and fuiiy enjoyed the story

Looking forward to reading the other parts

Ps really enjoyed our conversation earlier.

Looking forward to hearing from you again

I frequently read the stories presented in Literotica. Most are enjoyable reading and entertaining! This story was exceptional. I thank the author for a story that stirs the emotions and really brings memories of days gone by and joys of past times. I am near the end of my life and it does me good to look at what I had and how luck I have been. Again thank you! Ol’ Man

This story is basically a copy of this https://www.literotica.com/beta/s/naked-14 but instead of mother and son, it's siblings.

What can one say. I rarely swear. This was fucking brilliant. As an author I noticed a couple of errors as others have pointed out. I don't care....it was worth far more than 5*. This was such a beautiful story of the relationship between two siblings so carefully and slowly built up. This is what eroticism is......I envy your ability. Such a change from your trilogy I have just finished reading. This was so up my street I'll struggle to get out of the cul- de- sac. I was the oldest of three boys and happily admit how naïve I was in growing up. I had girl 'friends' but not a 'girlfriend' to learn with. I would have craved for the non-sexual love shown between your characters. There is no way I'm not going to read the rest of your stories. A.