All Comments on 'Argos: The Beginning'

a bit jumbled up and confusing plus way to rushed, slow down and develop a real plot and some character development as well.

But regarding the author's note: what's "excessive sex"?

Please let this be the beginning and the end of this lameass story. 1 star only because 0 is not an option.

Rushed but other wise, not bad.

just confused!!

I really loved your story, the cadence you write in, the sarcastic tenor - please write more. Forget the negative commenters. If half of them could write more than negative comments, it may be worth while to listen. However, based on their flawed views and lack of english predilection, I think you should continue. You have a huge fan here - anxiously awaiting your next vignette...............

They sound under age. Or you just can't write.

I guess you forgot to proof read or even get this edited because at times i felt like i was reading something written by a 10 yr old, spelling was ok, the construction was all over The place.

2 * for your story !

I enjoyed the story. Although it felt rushed with characters needing more back ground work. Please expand and continue. Don't allow the negative comments to deter you from evolving. This was your first story and i believe you will only grow and get better as you write more. Good job in any case for first attempt