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AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Lovely story

A beautiful, sweet story that obtained a sensuality without being sexual. My only criticism is that you should proof read your stories before publishing. Spell check and grammar programs are only going to catch so much. A good proofing will find whatever was missed the first time. Then let a friend proof read it. You'd be surprised at how much the final draft will have improved. Keep on writing! This was good work!

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