All Comments on 'Arlo Ch. 02'

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lonesomedove66lonesomedove66over 7 years ago
Arlo... Arlo... Arlo

Honesty is the best policy. You need to tell the truth and face up to things

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

Yup, 4'9" is really very short. five and a half is short for a guy too. Try that.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Makings of a very sweet love story

Ease up on the eye rolls, have Arlo be a bit more of a realistic height, most short men average around 5'4. 4'9 makes him sound like a little person, also he is too naive, there is no way a person in his situation would bring a potential new partner to the home he shares with a current violent partner. As stated it has the makings of a sweet love story, just make it a bit more believable. Over all, a good read, hope the next few chapters are not too far behind.

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