by musicankane
Add a bit more development and get an editor. Otherwise, its hot.
I loved this series of story and hope you continue..
Keep up the good work..
This story is hot!!!
I love this story, BUT... you seem to have a really short attention span. Have you EVER actually finished a story? Jake's Sister's, The Show, NOTHING ever gets completed!
I really hope its not going to be abandoned without a sign of ending... Keep it up...
Sorry for the MK reference, but for the love of God, one more chapter for The Show, one for this, you can easily wrap them up. What the hell?
I've read this several times. It has a lot of technical errors, but I choose to enjoy it anyway.
srgeek
This is one of the hottest thing that I have ever read in here. Please continue to update this. I love how Maxine is really loyal to Daren, its like a master and slave relationship in someway.
please please continue <3
i just looked at his story list and biography he stopped writing here to write a novel ... last updated story was 08 thats 3 years ago, well atleast he wrote some awesome stories before stopping posting them here. just wish he would have finished the story
I loved the story but was interrupted so often having to correct the grammar it shot the flow of the story all to hell.
Thanks for submitting but if you want people to read your stuff the edit needs to be much better. Consistent misspelled and misplaced words made it almost unreadable.
This is a great story, with so much potential for more. I would love to see you revisit it.
Thank you again for sharing.
This is a great story and I really hope that you are going to go further with it . I would love to know what the future holds for Max and Daren .