All Comments on 'Aruna and Rebecca Pt. 01'

It was well written and very enjoyable. Can not wait to read part two.

I love how you developed the story. Can't wait for the next part. Excellent description of the characters and emotions.

Really enjoyed this actual story. I'm often torn on all-sex-all-the-time or actual character development. You did a good mix of both.

Looking forward to reading more.

Hi Lena. I popped over to see your stuff because you left me some kind feedback earlier today. So glad I did. You paint a marvelous scene with lifelike characters and an honest realism.

It could use a tiny bit more clean up editing (mind you, I'm not perfect either) but overall I think this reads really well. And as a first offering it's an amazing feat! I'll close with an excerpt that I partidularly enjoyed - "Rebecca looked at my hands and copied me. She had very long fingers and on one of the fingers of her right hand she wore a very fine silver ring with a little rose on it. Even her hands were beautiful. I started to wonder if there would be any part of her I didn't like."

Bravo!

-PF

awsome first part so very hot and horny. love the build up to your first virgin cumming. cant wait for the next part as its your turn to being her to a hard cumiming. love the story very exciting writing

needs a bit of editing to check spelling but very expressive. Good development, good descriptions, good emotions.

Thanks.

I really enjoyed it. I gave 5 stars because it spoke volumes to me about first time feelings and discoveries. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing.

i really love your stories. i hope you keep writing.

I am putting this in my Favs, :-)

kisses xxxx

i really liked it it was really sexy and sweet

Cleverly written with good understanding of human emotions and subconscious reactions to another's feelings; intimate or otherwise.

I look forward to reading the later chapters.

Yes, there is a little bit of further editing to undertake but nothing bad enough to distract from the story.

I loved it, never change the way write please, while sex is an important part of any relationship there is oh so much more involved in making one complete, thank you for a lovely story.