All Comments on 'As Luck Would Have It Ch. 01'

it ended just as it was getting interesting

Disjointed first page that called for at least another two of same length to make a first chapter that could gain a reader's interest in subsequent developments.

You have me hooked and I would really like to see some more of your writing and where this story is going, great start and 4 stars only because of the abrupt ending! Thanks! :) Smiling Jaybird :)

Disjointed, hard to follow, and it's 'won't' not 'wont'

A good beginning, but ending the chapter here is just teasing.

Starting off well, now let's have more.

Needs more chapters, please. Jayden should have caught Jeremiah in a deserted spot and beat him nearly to death...

Eagerly awaiting Chapter 2. :)

WTF? This isn't even part of a story? It's 3 scenes, 2 focusing on different people who've never met and have absolutely no connection to each other. The teaser say "Jayden's life changes when he wins the lotto and a Porn Star." There's more information about what's going on in the story in that than there is in the actual story. Some woman named Rachel sucked the dick of some guy to get into porn and Some guy called Jayden, who has been divorced for 2 years after catching his wife fucking someone else, got fired for harassing a woman at work by honking his horn at her. Brilliant. There needs to be more to engage the audience but after 8 years and no 2nd chapter it seems like this is all there ever will be.

My first thought is 'What Story? Are you so disinterested that you didn't notice the story never started?

Terribly disappointed😡

You didn’t finish the story numbers. Why even start what you dud

It's a hurried start, but good. You just need to finish. Since he didn't win the lottery or get the porn star in this chapter, you should fix the description.