All Comments on 'Ashanti and the King'

Way too short to get any feel for the story and its characters. Seriously suggest making the next chapter a lot longer and include something actually happening.

I am assuming that it is in non con because something nasty is going to befall her...that really should have been intimated here.

Your writing is good though so don't take umbrage at my comment...not enough wake up coffee yet :-)

Great start!

An opening paragraph maybe, but certainly not a story.

Was waiting for something dark to hook me in! But I'll shall patiently wait for the next chapter, hopefully it's much longer !

Hello everyone! Thank you all for your comments and I'm sorry that the story was short. This is my first time writing a story for literotica and I didn't know how short or long i was supposed to make it so I made it three pages on word. I will endeavour to make it longer In coming chapters! Also this was just a start so there will be more details as time goes on. Thank you all for reading!! Much love

My, people are impatient! I think this is a very interesting low key start..loads to come, I feel and we look forward to it..SOON, please!

I hope you continue this story I see you haven't updated in over a year.