All Comments on 'Ashley & Joe's Decent Pt. 01'

You spent too much time telling us what happened. Like after her date with Paul... where's the conversation, the feeling, the imagery? This is crappy writing. The secret to writing is showing the reader through description, dialogue, and style. This is just a second-rate exposition.

Descent? Is that the word you were looking for? Or just don't care enough to get it right for your readers?

@anonymous you are are mean to me. You are making me wet - Luv Ashley

Deleting comments doesn't change reality. It just shows that your immature as well as stupid...

What’s the whore upset about? She helped make him a cuck.

Joe your wife is bitch. She isn't a women for a married life. Go in a new life.

This is utter crap.

Another one story troll. LOL. Totally whacked.

When somebody misspells the title, I don't read. Not worth my time. JPB

Hot!!! Needs a second chapter where Joe descends further into depravity and Paul uses Ashley like the whore she is!!!!!!