All Comments on 'Ashley, My Step Granddaughter'

One lucky grandpa!

Changing the POV every paragraph isn't stylish or interesting, it's a gimmick and a bad one at that. It's distracting. Yes, it makes the story stand out, but in a bad way.

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If you want to have both perspectives, it would have been better to keep one POV for several paragraphs and then switch. Even then, there should be some indication of the transition, such as a line with nothing but special characters, such as the ones I used between these paragraphs.

jumps all over.