by Demospider
I enjoy your stories, and found them because of my pee fetish, but IMHO "Mind Control" would be a more appropriate category.
Great story. feel sorry for Julia, but I guess that is meant to be, but shared the excitement. Going to read the whole series, thanks.
Good story and a good concept, just a bit short. With stories likes this I believe it is key to keep the writing style simple but adding enough detail to create a vivid picture. For example how you told us she learned mind control and gave a little bit of a back story but did not try to make it all about how, rather what she did with it. Keep up the good work.
If this is the way she treats her sister who "get along fine most of the time", look out everybody else! Story does show promise though. I like the concept of being made to do something, while still realising it is wrong.