by jack30341
Hey!
Just sayin’
Tho I know to go slow. I am, after all, anonymous.
In a field of craftsmen you are an artist. Well written - well done.
Repetition of 'some,' irritated slightly. Otherwise quite entertaining. 3stars.
well done. lots of teasing anticipation and the payoff was some hot fucking. good job
Awsome story. It kept me going hard. Would like to read Ch2. Keep up the good work.
Great story. Keep wriiting away. Can't wait for next chapter......Will there be one?? Try to include some more dirty talk/dialogue, but not too over the top though-that damages the credibility of the story. So far you are doing great. Excellent scripted details. Seemed very real in terms of details of how the characters felt about ea. other. Far out! wow!
Story started out ok back finish very strong. Well written and there seems great potential for an even steamier chapter two. It's the first story of yours I've read and I will read your others. Will look forward to future stories.
Without a doubt, one of the best I have read. Great story, great build-up and great climax. Can't wait to read more.